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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. v.3

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in connection with the day-long meeting that we organised at your hotel - "The Richmond", on 28th January 2020. I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for successfully hosting us, and also express our concern about the food quality, which we expect would be better in the future. Two days ago, I took feedback from the participants who joined the meeting. Although they liked the hotel, including its facilities and the services of your affable staff, many of them complained about the food we were served. Indeed, some of the menu items that were served during the lunch were not properly cooked and we did not enjoy the taste and aroma of the food. Soup and bread were served cold and that was unexpected. The lack of western food items on the menu was surprising to some of the participants. I believe you should take steps so that all the dishes are cooked properly and served in time. I also recommend that you add some western dishes to your menu. I wish you a good day and hope that that you will consider my suggestions. Yours faithfully, Brian Marsh
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in connection with the day-long meeting that we
organised
at your hotel
-
"
The Richmond
"
, on 28th January 2020. I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for
successfully
hosting us, and
also
express our concern about the
food
quality, which we
expect
would be better in the future.

Two days ago, I took feedback from the participants who
joined
the meeting. Although they liked the hotel, including its facilities and the services of your affable staff,
many
of them complained about the
food
we
were served
.
Indeed
,
some of the
menu items that
were served
during the lunch were not
properly
cooked and
we did not enjoy the taste and aroma of the
food
. Soup and bread
were served
cold
and that
was unexpected
. The lack of western
food
items on the menu was surprising to
some of the
participants.

I believe you should take steps
so
that all the dishes
are cooked
properly
and served in time. I
also
recommend that you
add
some
western dishes to your menu.

I
wish you a
good
day and hope
that that
you will consider my suggestions.

Yours
faithfully
,

Brian Marsh
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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