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You have just read an artice in an international travel magazine which containedsome information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter-Correct the information in the article-explain why it is import v. 2

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to draw your attention to an wrong information provided about the Ambaji temple, located at Ahmedabad and how it can be corrected. I am regular reader of your magazine because most of the details are correct, although in the article of dated 25th August, it is mentioned that the Ambaji temple is a tourist destination with good accommodation facilities and best suitable for elderly; however the reality is totally reverse. The weather is extremely cold which does not suits to old age visitors and people having respiratory disorders. Besides, although hotels are not available, tourist can live in cottages which are safe, neat and clean. It is absolutely crucial to give correct information because many readers plan their holidays based on details provided by you as yours magazine is one of the most trustworthy publications. If you provide any incorrect or incomplete information, it would impact your brand equity. It would like to suggest you to correct the information provided in the earlier article and rewrite whole script once again. This would not only beneficial for the regular readers but also good for you to maintain transparency. Hope you would understand importance of the correcting details and provide correct one in next article. Yours faithfully, Smith Gandhi

IELTS letter You have just read an artice in an international travel magazine which containedsome information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter-Correct the information in the article-explain why it is import v.2

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to draw your attention to an
wrong
information
provided about the
Ambaji
temple, located at Ahmedabad and how it can
be corrected
. I
am regular
reader of your magazine
because
most of the
details
are
correct
, although in the article of dated 25th August, it
is mentioned
that the
Ambaji
temple is a tourist destination with
good
accommodation facilities and best suitable for elderly;
however
the reality is
totally
reverse. The weather is
extremely
cold
which does not suits to
old
age visitors
and
people
having respiratory disorders.
Besides
, although hotels are not available, tourist can
live
in cottages which are safe, neat and clean. It is
absolutely
crucial to give
correct
information
because
many
readers plan their holidays based on
details
provided by you as yours magazine is one of the most trustworthy
publications
. If you provide any incorrect or incomplete
information
, it would impact your brand equity. It would like to suggest you to
correct
the
information
provided in the earlier article and rewrite whole script once again. This would not
only
beneficial
for
the
regular readers
but
also
good
for you to maintain transparency. Hope you would understand importance of the correcting
details
and provide
correct
one in
next
article. Yours
faithfully
, Smith Gandhi
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
Letter
12 paragraphs
213 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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