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You are currently running a course and have a part-time job. Your boss suggested that you leave your course and work full time. Write a letter to your boss. In the letter, you should: tell him/her your decisionexplain the reason for your decision. v.2

You are currently running a course and have a part-time job. Your boss suggested that you leave your course and work full time. Write a letter to your boss. In the letter, you should: tell him/her your decisionexplain the reason for your decision. v. 2
Dear Sir: It is a great news for me that you are hoping to see me working at your office as a full time employee. I am pretty much excited about your offer as it has an attractive package. However, I might not be able to continue as a full time employee as I do have some unfinished exam. I am currently at the last part of the Financial Analytics Course. I am doing well in this course. As I do have a finance background and I am working in your organization as a part time Investment Analytic thus this course is helping me to do well in my career. You might notice that this course is helping to improve my depth of knowledge and teaching me the practical implications. This is beneficial for your organization too. After completing this course I will be able to continue as a full time employee in your office. This current situation is already known to you. It is thus up to you if you want me to continue as a part time employee and let me complete my course and be beneficial to your company or else. I am so much grateful that you are considering my opinions. I am looking forward to get reply from you. Yours faithfully, Rafiur Rahman
Dear Sir:

It is
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a great news
for me that you are hoping to
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see
me working at your office as a full
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time
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employee
. I am pretty much excited about your offer as it has an attractive package.
However
, I might not be able to continue as a full
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time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
as I do have
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some
unfinished exam.

I am
currently
at the last part of the Financial Analytics
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Course
. I am doing well in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
. As I do have a finance background and I am working in your organization as a part
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
Investment Analytic
thus
this
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course
is helping me to do well in my career. You might notice that this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
is helping to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
my depth of knowledge and teaching me the practical implications. This is beneficial for your organization too. After completing this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
I will be able to continue as a full
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
in your office.

This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
situation is already known to you. It is
thus
up to you if you want me to continue as a part
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me complete my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
and be beneficial to your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
or else.

I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much grateful that you are considering my opinions. I am looking forward to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
reply from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Rafiur
Rahman
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You are currently running a course and have a part-time job. Your boss suggested that you leave your course and work full time. Write a letter to your boss. In the letter, you should: tell him/her your decisionexplain the reason for your decision. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
217 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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