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Essay topics: You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a familyfor six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter- Explain why you would like the job- give details v. 2

Dear Sir or Madam, I am a 34-year-old Iranian male who is studying for his master’s degree at the University of Melbourne. I am writing to announce to you my greatest enthusiastic about your job offer and to give you some information about myself concerning this job. Actually, as an overseas student, I am in desperate need of acquiring knowledge about Australian culture in the account of enhancing my understanding around this very issue by means of cultural interchange. Thus, your job offer has created a great opportunity for me to nail this aim. Whereas I am very good with little kids, although I do not have a baby, I had a chance to gain experience for helping my sister to bring up her little one for roughly six months. Accordingly, I have not only baby passionate but also experience for managing what you might expect me. As I mentioned, I am a master student, therefore, I have ample time for my pastime which I rather spend it playing with your kid and if you let me take him/her to amusement park or playground to make a good memory for your baby and by some precious time for you to spend for yourself. Because I am totally aware of that a little free time would be as of a premium for you. I would be appreciated if you consider inviting me over for an interview to know each other better, and I would be more than grateful if you let me be along with you during this six-month journey. Should you need any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me. I am looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, SAEED NAJD ATAEI

IELTS letter Essay topics: You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a familyfor six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter- Explain why you would like the job- give details v.2

Dear Sir or Madam, I am a 34-year-
old
Iranian male who is studying for his master’s degree at the University of Melbourne. I am writing to announce to you my greatest enthusiastic about your job offer and to give you
some
information about myself concerning this job. Actually, as an overseas student, I am in desperate need of acquiring knowledge about Australian culture in the account of enhancing my understanding around this
very
issue by means of cultural interchange.
Thus
, your job offer has created a great opportunity for me to nail this aim. Whereas I am
very
good
with
little
kids, although I do not have a baby, I had a chance to gain experience for helping my sister to bring up her
little
one for roughly six months.
Accordingly
, I have not
only
baby passionate
but
also
experience for managing what you might
expect
me. As I mentioned, I am a master student,
therefore
, I have ample time for my pastime which I
rather
spend it playing with your kid and if you
let
me take him/her to amusement park or playground to
make
a
good
memory for your baby and by
some
precious time for you to spend for yourself.
Because
I am
totally
aware of that a
little
free time would be as of a premium for you. I would
be appreciated
if you consider inviting me over for an interview to know each other better, and I would be more than grateful if you
let
me be along with you during this six-month journey. Should you need any
further
information,
please
do not hesitate to contact me. I am looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. Yours
faithfully
,
SAEED
NAJD
ATAEI
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Letter
9 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≥ 7
  • Band score ≤ 6
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