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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter Explain why you would like the job give details of why you would v.5

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter Explain why you would like the job give details of why you would v. 5
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing in response to your advertisement in Perth Today magazine of June 2019 edition. I am a resident of New-Zealand. My children are studying in Canada and my husband has recently been transferred in the middle east for a project of 6 months. Since I am alone at home and experienced in taking care of young children, I would like to apply for a childcare job. I have worked as a deputy' s head in childcare from last 12 years. Working for such a long duration has given me enough experience to manage child, and how to keep them engaged in absent of their parents and follow the prescribed schedule given by guardians. Moreover, I am sincere, tidy, patient and hard-working. Therefore, my experience and sincerity towards the childcare will help me to perform this duty in a better way. One of my cousin sisters has recently been shifted to the western part of Perth. So, when I am free, I can go to visit her and spend some time at her place. This will help me to spend my free time without being a burden on you. If you have any questions, you can mail me at abc@gmail. com or call at 44553366 Hoping for a positive reply. Your' s faithfully Rashi Patel.
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in response to your advertisement in Perth
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Today
magazine of June 2019 edition.

I am a resident of New-Zealand. My children are studying in Canada and my husband has recently
been transferred
in the
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middle east
for a project of 6 months. Since I am alone at home and experienced in taking care of young children, I would like to apply for a childcare job.

I have worked as a
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deputy&
#039; s head in childcare from last 12 years. Working for such a long duration has
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given
me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
experience to manage child, and how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
them engaged in absent of their parents and follow the prescribed schedule
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
by guardians.
Moreover
, I am sincere, tidy, patient and
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hard
-working.
Therefore
, my experience and sincerity towards the childcare will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to perform this duty in a better way.

One of my cousin sisters has recently
been shifted
to the western part of Perth.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, when I am free, I can go to visit her and spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time at her place. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to spend my free time without being a burden on you.

If you have any questions, you can mail me at
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abc@gmail
.
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com
or call at 44553366

Hoping for a
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positive
reply.

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Your&
#039; s
faithfully


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Rashi
Patel.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter Explain why you would like the job give details of why you would v. 5

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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