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You have recently gone to live in a new city. v.1

You have recently gone to live in a new city. v. 1
Dear Anna, I hope you are doing great. I am sorry that I have not been in touch with you lately and honestly speaking during the last couple of weeks, I rarely had any time for me. I am very excited to let you know that I have moved to Denver a few days ago. As you know, I was expecting a promotion and last month our office administration promoted me to the Senior Manager position of their new branch in Denver. Therefore, I had to move to Denver which, in my opinion, is a great city to live in. Situated in the South Platte River Valley, this modern city draws openness from the Great Plains to the east and features spectacular Rocky Mountain views to the west. I have rented a house in the northeast part of the city and it has a magnificent surrounding. The house I am living in has two-bedrooms, a guest room, a large kitchen and a garden. I have planted a few flower-plant and can't wait to show you. Please arrange some time and visit me sometime next month. I am sure we will enjoy our time together. Waiting to see you soon. Warm wishes, Emily
Dear Anna,

I hope you are doing great. I am sorry that I have not been in touch with you lately and
honestly
speaking during the last couple of weeks, I rarely had any time for me.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
excited to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
to Denver a few days ago. As you know, I was expecting a promotion and last month our office administration promoted me to the Senior Manager position of their new branch in Denver.
Therefore
, I had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to Denver which, in my opinion, is a great city to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in.

Situated in the South Platte River Valley, this modern city draws openness from the Great Plains to the east and features spectacular Rocky Mountain views to the west. I have rented a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
in the northeast part of the city and it has a magnificent surrounding. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
I am living in has two-bedrooms, a guest room, a large kitchen and a garden. I have planted a few flower-plant and can't wait to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
you.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
arrange
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time and visit me sometime
next
month. I am sure we will enjoy our time together.

Waiting to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Warm wishes,

Emily
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have recently gone to live in a new city. v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
201 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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