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You have just bought a Walkman from a shop at the airport but found a fault with it after reaching home Write to the shop for a solution v.2

You have just bought a Walkman from a shop at the airport but found a fault with it after reaching home Write to the shop for a solution v. 2
Dear Sir/madam, I am writing to bring to your attention that, the walkman I bought yesterday from your store at the airport is faulty. I would like you to please replace the product. The walkman I purchased on 29th January, was a gift for my daughter. As i was running late for my daughter birthday, I straight way took the product and left for home or else I would have first checked it at your store and then leave. Unfortunately as she tried to play it, the play button pops back and the audio stops. We tried it with variuos other disc thinking that it could be becaise of the faulty disc but it happened with all of them. Therefore, I would request you to replace this product as this issue seem to be irrepairable. However, I am sending this walkman back and appreciate if the replacement is done at the earliest. Hope you will to do the needful. Yours Faithfully, Abhishek Agrawal
Dear Sir/madam,

I am writing to bring to your attention that, the
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walkman
I
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bought
yesterday from your store at the airport is faulty. I would like you to
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please
replace the product.

The
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walkman
I
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purchased
on 29th January, was a gift for my daughter. As
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i
was running late for my daughter birthday, I straight way took the product and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
for home or else I would have
first
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
it at your store and then
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leave
. Unfortunately as she tried to play it, the play button pops back and the audio
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stops
. We tried it with
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variuos
other disc thinking that it could be
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becaise
of the faulty disc
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but
it happened with all of them.

Therefore
, I would request you to replace this product as this issue seem to be
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irrepairable
.
However
, I am sending this
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walkman
back and appreciate if the replacement
is done
at the earliest.

Hope you will to do the needful.

Yours
Faithfully
,

Abhishek
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Agrawal
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have just bought a Walkman from a shop at the airport but found a fault with it after reaching home Write to the shop for a solution v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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