Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my utter disappointment regarding the food factory device that I purchased from your shop a few days ago. I was very excited to purchase this kitchen appliance but disappointed to find that it was poorly made and has a manufacturing flaw.
I visited your shop on 4th November and purchased a brand new Philips food factory that comes with two years warranty. However, to my sheer astonishment, when I unwrapped the box and tried to run the device, it did not work. I thoroughly checked all the connections as the problem could have been on my end but this was not the case. Immediately, I called the shop and complained about the faulty product. I also provided all the details the person on the other side of the phone requested. He assured me that a company representative will be visiting me in a couple of days and replace the product. But this has never proved to be true. The order number is 8541203 and I am attaching a copy of my receipt.
I urge you to immediately address the issue and replace the faulty product with a new and fresh one.
Yours faithfully,
Mubashir Noorani
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my utter disappointment regarding the food factory device that I  
purchased
 from your shop a few days ago. I was  
very
 excited to  
purchase
 this kitchen appliance  
but
 disappointed to find that it was  
poorly
 made and has a manufacturing flaw. 
I
 visited your shop on 4th November and  
purchased
 a  
brand new
 Philips food factory that  
comes
 with two years warranty.  
However
, to my sheer astonishment, when I unwrapped the box and tried to run the device, it did not work. I  
thoroughly
  checked
 all the connections as the problem could have been on my  
end
  but
 this was not the case. Immediately, I called the shop and complained about the faulty product. I  
also
 provided all the  
details
 the person on the other side of the phone requested. He assured me that a  
company
 representative will be visiting me in a couple of days and replace the product.  
But
 this has never proved to be true. The order number is  
8541203 and
 I am attaching a copy of my receipt.
I urge you to immediately address the issue and replace the faulty product with a new and fresh one.
Yours  
faithfully
, 
Mubashir
  Noorani
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