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You were supposed to go on an interview in a few weeks, but you have since found out you cannot go on the date arranged. v.4

You were supposed to go on an interview in a few weeks, but you have since found out you cannot go on the date arranged. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request you to reschedule my interview at a later date. I will travel to Australia during the first week of September to attend some emergency office work which unfortunately contradicts my earlier schedule to meet you in a formal interview for the position of assistant manager in your company. I sincerely apologise for any inconvenience caused due to this and I am hoping to meet you anytime after 8th September. I am supposed to meet you to further discuss my candidacy for the position of assistant manager in your reputed organisation on 5th September and I am really looking forward to that meeting. However, I was assigned to a new project recently and my current employer expects me to visit our Australian office during the first week of September. It will be a training programme from 4th till 7th September and I will be in Australia during this time. Considering the situation, I am hoping that you would agree to meet me at your convenient time, preferably after the 8th of September. I will be ready to meet you on 9th September if the schedule suits you. My sincere apologies for the request to reschedule the interview but I can assure you that I really am looking forward to meeting you in a formal interview as planned. I consider your company as one of the best places to work in and I hope that I would be able to prove my worth once hired. Thank you in advance. Yours faithfully, David Henderson
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to request you to reschedule my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interview
at a later date. I will travel to Australia during the
first
week of September to attend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
emergency office work which unfortunately contradicts my earlier schedule to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you in a formal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interview
for the position of assistant manager in your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
sincerely
Possible spelling mistake. 'apologise' is British English.
apologise
for any inconvenience caused due to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
this and
I am hoping to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you anytime after 8th September.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am supposed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you to
further
discuss my candidacy for the position of assistant manager in your reputed
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
on 5th
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
September and
I am
really
looking forward to that meeting.
However
, I
was assigned
to a new project recently and my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
employer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expects
me to visit our Australian office during the
first
week of September. It will be a training
Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.
programme
from 4th till 7th September and I will be in Australia during this time. Considering the situation, I am hoping that you would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
me at your convenient time,
preferably
after the 8th of September. I will be ready to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you on 9th September if the schedule suits you.

My sincere apologies for the request to reschedule the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interview
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I can assure you that I
really
Did you mean "am I"?
am
looking forward to meeting you in a formal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interview
as planned. I consider your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
as one of the best places to work in and I hope that I would be able to prove my worth once hired.

Thank you in advance.

Yours
faithfully
,

David Henderson
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter You were supposed to go on an interview in a few weeks, but you have since found out you cannot go on the date arranged. v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
259 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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