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You have lost and item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter-Describe the item-Explain where & when you left it-Say what action you would like the company to take v.1

You have lost and item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter-Describe the item-Explain where & when you left it-Say what action you would like the company to take v. 1
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to inform you about my laptop, which I mistakenly left on the train, while I was travelling from Central station to Downtown on Jan 13, 2019. I lost a laptop of HP make, which is a model from HP3200 series. It has 15 inches screen and was in a grey sling laptop bag. Additionally, as an identification mark I have my name initials AJ on the bottom left of the gadget’s screen. After reconfirming from my travel ticket, I missed the belonging in the C-3 coach of the train I assume I forget to pick the bag, as I in note to get down at the station considering the heavy football at the station. In case you trace my belonging, I request you to give me a call on the suggested mobile number on the lost and found form enclosed herewith. Looking forward for your response. Yours faithfully Alex Jhonson
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you about my laptop, which I
mistakenly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
on the train, while I was travelling from Central station to Downtown on Jan 13, 2019.

I lost a laptop of HP
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
, which is a model from HP3200 series. It has
Writing for an international audience? Consider adding the metric equivalent.
15 inches
screen and was in a
Possible spelling mistake. 'grey' is British English.
grey
sling laptop bag.
Additionally
, as an identification mark I have my name initials AJ on the bottom
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
of the gadget’s screen.

After reconfirming from my travel ticket, I missed the belonging in the C-3 coach of the train I assume I forget to pick the bag, as I in note to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
down at the station considering the heavy football at the station.

In case you trace my belonging, I request you to give me a call on the suggested mobile number on the lost and found form enclosed herewith.

Looking forward for your response.

Yours
faithfully


Alex
Possible spelling mistake found.
Jhonson
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have lost and item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter-Describe the item-Explain where & when you left it-Say what action you would like the company to take v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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