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You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you got home, you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v.3

You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you got home, you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Martin Ben, and I am writing this letter to inform you that I have left one of my bags at your hotel before leaving Adelaide for Sydney. Unfortunately, I came to know about this unfortunate mistake only after arriving at Sydney Airport. Anyway, I stayed in room number 221, and I might have left the bag in one of the closed cabinets of the TV stand. Now, to describe the bag a little for your convenience, it is a small, bright yellow colour handbag for men, and it has a single white colour belt. As for its contents, the bag has some precious drawings of my little niece, who drew them only for me. Besides, it also has a few precious gifts which were chosen and bought by my family members. So the little bag is priceless to me because of its emotional value. So, once you find the bag, please send it to me in a courier mail service. And, also please don’t forget to charge the courier fee from my credit card. By the way, the credit card information should in on your file. Yours faithfully, Martin Ben
Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Martin Ben, and I am writing this letter to inform you that I have
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left
one of my
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bags
at your hotel
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before
leaving Adelaide for Sydney. Unfortunately, I came to know about this unfortunate mistake
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only
after arriving at Sydney Airport.

Anyway, I stayed in room number 221, and I might have
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left
the
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bag
in one of the closed cabinets of the TV stand.
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Now
, to
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describe
the
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bag
a
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little
for your convenience, it is a
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small
, bright yellow
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colour
handbag for
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men
, and it has a single white
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colour
belt. As for its contents, the
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bag
has
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some
precious drawings of my
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little
niece, who drew them
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only
for me.
Besides
, it
also
has a few precious gifts which
were chosen
and
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bought
by my family members.
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So
the
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little
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bag
is priceless to me
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because
of its emotional value.

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So
, once you find the
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bag
,
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please
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send
it to me in a courier mail service. And,
also
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please
don’t forget to charge the courier fee from my credit card. By the way, the credit card information should in on your file.

Yours
faithfully
,

Martin Ben
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you got home, you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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