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You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday. When you got home, you realised you had left your wallet there. v.3

You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday. When you got home, you realised you had left your wallet there. v. 3
Dear John, Hope this letter finds you well. I have landed safely in Dubai. I really enjoyed the holiday I spent with you guys. This was one of the best holidays ever. I am writing to thank you and to request you for the wallet I left at your house. I want to thank you from the bottom of my heart for having me at your place and making the trip so special. Last week was hands-down the best time of my life as I have never witnessed such a beautiful place and a vibrant culture before. Also, the food you cooked for me was delicious and celestial. I already miss the flavour and taste! When I reached Dubai, I realized I left my wallet at your house. I believe it was sitting atop your piano when I was packing my stuff and I forgot to pick it up in a hurry, luckily my passport was not in the wallet, so I was still able to travel. Still, there are some important items in my wallet so I would request you to courier it to me as soon as possible. You can send it to my office address as I spend most of my time there. Say hello to all. Warm wishes, Sam
Dear John,

Hope this letter finds you well. I have landed
safely
in Dubai. I
really
enjoyed the holiday I spent with you guys. This was one of the best holidays ever. I am writing to thank you and to request you for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wallet
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
at your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

I want to thank you from the bottom of my heart for having me at your place and making the trip
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
special. Last week was hands-down the best time of my life as I have never witnessed such a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
place and a vibrant culture
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
.
Also
, the food you cooked for me was delicious and celestial. I already miss the
Possible spelling mistake. 'flavour' is British English.
flavour
and taste!

When I reached Dubai, I realized I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wallet
at your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. I believe it was sitting atop your piano when I was packing my stuff and I forgot to pick it up in a hurry, luckily my passport was not in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wallet
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I was
still
able to travel.

Still
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
items in my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wallet
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I would request you to courier it to me as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. You can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
it to my office address as I spend most of my time there.

Say hello to all.

Warm wishes,

Sam
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday. When you got home, you realised you had left your wallet there. v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
212 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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