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You won a competition and received a vacation for two as a prize. Write a letter to ask someone to go on holiday with you. v. 1

Dear Monika, I'm absolutely thrilled to inform you that I've recently won a prize in a quiz competition. It was organised by a newly launched TV channel and I won the first prize - a rare achievement for me to win a quiz! Interestingly, the prize was a full holiday package for two in Athens, Greece and they will pay the airfare, hotel costs and food bills. What greater opportunity can I get to travel to a great city than that? I would really like you to accompany me on this trip. I can make the trip anytime during this summer and please arrange for a week's leave off office. It is a four-day trip and I am sure we will love this vacation. The birthplace of philosophy and democracy, the city of Athens has world-class cultural heritage attractions. Named after the Greek Goddess, Athena, the goddess of wisdom and inspiration, Athens has always been at the cultural core. You are my best friend and just when I got the price, I thought about you. You are such a great companion that I would not want to miss you during this trip. Please do inform me if you can make it before the summer ends. I am really looking forward to hearing 'Yes' from you. Warm wishes, Amanda

IELTS letter You won a competition and received a vacation for two as a prize. Write a letter to ask someone to go on holiday with you. v.1

Dear Monika, I'm
absolutely
thrilled to inform you that I've recently won a prize in a quiz competition. It was
organised
by a
newly
launched TV channel and I won the
first
prize
-
a rare achievement for me to win a quiz!
Interestingly
, the prize was a full holiday package for two in Athens,
Greece and
they will pay the airfare, hotel costs and food bills. What greater opportunity can I
get
to travel to a great city than that? I would
really
like you to accompany me on this trip. I can
make
the trip anytime during this summer and
please
arrange for a week's
leave
off office. It is a four-day
trip and
I am sure we will
love
this vacation. The birthplace of philosophy and democracy, the city of Athens has world-
class
cultural heritage attractions. Named after the Greek Goddess, Athena, the goddess of wisdom and inspiration, Athens has always been at the cultural core. You are my best friend and
just
when I
got
the price, I
thought
about you. You are such a great companion that I would not want to miss you during this trip.
Please
do inform me if you can
make
it
before
the summer ends. I am
really
looking forward to hearing 'Yes' from you. Warm wishes, Amanda
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
Letter
7 paragraphs
217 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≥ 7
  • Band score ≤ 6
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