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You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. v.3

You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. v. 3
I trust you are doing splendidly and enjoying the season. Thank you very much for agreeing to house-sit for me while I will be in Ireland to see my sister this summer. If you need to reach me for any reason, please ring my mobile phone. I trust you already have my number. Alternatively, you can find it on a sticky note placed on the land phone table. I will stay with my sister in Limerick city in Ireland and would return on 24th October. It was a relief when you agreed to house-sit for me. I owe you a big one! My dog needs to be fed thrice a day - morning, noon and evening. Please put dog food in his dish at the proper time. You will find the food containers in the kitchen pantry. Also, please check throughout the day to make sure he has fresh water. You can take him outside in the evening if you like. He is very friendly and does not bark at night. I would like you to close the doors and windows in the evening and check the mailbox every other day. If someone asks about me, please inform that I am away and could be reached on my mobile phone. Finally, water my plant every evening. The indoor cactus plants need water only when the soil is dry. Keep the outside lights on at night. I look forward to seeing you on my return. Warm wishes, Elsa
I trust you are doing
splendidly
and enjoying the season. Thank you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much for agreeing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
-sit for me while I will be in Ireland to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
my sister this summer. If you need to reach me for any reason,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
please
ring my mobile phone. I trust you already have my number.
Alternatively
, you can find it on a sticky note placed on the land phone table.

I will stay with my sister in Limerick city in Ireland and would return on 24th October. It was a relief when you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
-sit for me. I owe you a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
one!

My dog needs to
be fed
thrice a day
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
morning, noon and evening.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Please
put dog food in his dish at the proper time. You will find the food containers in the kitchen pantry.
Also
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
throughout the day to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure he has fresh water. You can take him outside in the evening if you like. He is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
friendly and does not bark at night.

I would like you to close the doors and windows in the evening and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
the mailbox every other day. If someone asks about me,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
please
inform that I am away and could
be reached
on my mobile phone.
Finally
, water my plant every evening. The indoor cactus plants need water
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
when the soil is dry.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Keep
the outside lights on at night.

I look forward to seeing you on my return.

Warm wishes,

Elsa
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
246 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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