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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. v.3

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, A couple of weeks ago, your popular international travel magazine, in its 250th edition, published an article about my hometown in an effort to provide a bit more exposure to the travel-related activities in it. Well, while I appreciate this noble effort of yours, I regret to inform you that there is a factual error in your article that requires immediate correction. In fact, your article in question says that the migratory birds visit our town during the month of April while the correct information is that they start to visit our hometown from early February. By the way, correcting this information on your magazine is very important for the livelihood of many people in my hometown because they heavily rely on the tourist spending of the visitors who come to visit our town in order to see these migratory birds. Therefore, I would like to request you to please issue a correctional notice in your magazine’s next publication about the previous mistake so that the prospective tourists don’t get confused about the timing of the migratory birds’ visit to my hometown. Thank you for your consideration in advance. Yours faithfully, Antonio Perez
Dear Sir or Madam,

A couple of weeks ago, your popular international travel magazine, in its 250th edition, published an article about my
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hometown
in an effort to provide a bit more exposure to the travel-related activities in it. Well, while I appreciate this noble effort of yours, I regret to inform you that there is a factual error in your article that requires immediate correction.

In fact, your article in question says that the migratory birds
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visit
our town during the month of April while the correct information is that they
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start
to
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our
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hometown
from early February. By the way, correcting this information on your magazine is
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important
for the livelihood of
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many
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people
in my
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hometown
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because
they
heavily
rely on the tourist spending of the visitors who
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come
to
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visit
our town in order to
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see
these migratory birds.

Therefore
, I would like to request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
issue a correctional notice in your magazine’s
next
publication about the previous mistake
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that the prospective tourists don’t
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get
confused about the timing of the migratory birds’
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visit
to my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hometown
. Thank you for your consideration in advance.

Yours
faithfully
,

Antonio Perez
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
196 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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