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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters Do you agree or disagree v.3

Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters v. 3
It is often argued whether poor nations need to be assisted with humanitarian aid during natural calamities by rich countries. This essay agrees with the statement because weaker nations have lack of resources and poor economy to recuperate immediately from such natural disasters. Natural calamity often causes destruction of property, loss of human lives and suffering therefore a developed world must provide immediate medical assistance and logistical support to the affected country which lacks such critical assets. This will not only avoid further loss of life but also mean immediate restoration of the situation. Recent research concluded found that economically weaker countries like Papua New Genie and Indonesia which could not receive any assistance from rich nations suffered great loss of life and infrastructure as compared to countries who did. Moreover economically weaker countries often lack monetary funds to start immediate rebuilding measures to their infrastructure like restoration of hospitals, school, and highways thus affecting the daily lives of people. Hence wealthier nations fund many infrastructure restoration projects which can help to bring life back to normal which otherwise would not be possible in shorter span of time. Recent study from United Nations found that restoration of educational institutions and hospitals happened faster in earth quake affected countries like Papua and Timor Leste as most of these programs were funded by the United States of America which otherwise would have taken years. To conclude, backward countries should receive humanitarian aid during natural disasters because they lack critical assets and are economically weak to immediately control the destruction and start rebuilding measures to bring life back to normal.
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argued whether poor
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nations
need to
be assisted
with humanitarian aid during natural calamities by rich
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countries
. This essay
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agrees
with the statement
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because
weaker
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nations
have
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lack
of resources and poor economy to recuperate immediately from such natural disasters.

Natural calamity
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often
causes destruction of property, loss of human
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lives
and suffering
therefore
a developed world
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must
provide immediate medical assistance and logistical support to the
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affected
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country
which
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lacks
such critical assets. This will not
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only
avoid
further
loss of
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life
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but
also
mean immediate
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restoration
of the situation. Recent research concluded found that
economically
weaker
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countries
like
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Papua
New Genie and Indonesia which could not receive any assistance from rich
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nations
suffered great loss of
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life
and infrastructure as compared to
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countries
who did.

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economically
weaker
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countries
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often
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lack
monetary funds to
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start
immediate rebuilding measures to their infrastructure like
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restoration
of hospitals, school, and highways
thus
affecting the daily
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lives
of
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people
.
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nations
fund
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many
infrastructure
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restoration
projects which can
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help
to bring
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life
back to normal which
otherwise
would not be possible in shorter span of time. Recent study from United
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Nations
found that
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restoration
of educational institutions and hospitals happened faster in earth quake
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affected
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countries
like
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Papua
and Timor
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Leste
as most of these programs
were funded
by the United States of America which
otherwise
would have taken years.

To conclude
, backward
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countries
should receive humanitarian aid during natural disasters
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because
they
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lack
critical assets and are
economically
weak to immediately control the destruction and
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start
rebuilding measures to bring
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life
back to normal.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters v. 3

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4 paragraphs
267 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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