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You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. v.2

You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. v. 2
Dear Ms Meena, I am Priya and I have recently moved with my family into the house next to yours. I am a doctor and I live with my daughter, and husband, who is a lawyer. I have planned to throw a party and invite some guests on the 10th of June and I would really appreciate your presence at that party. Since this is the first time our family is moving into a house that we own, we have planned to throw a party and invite some friends, colleagues, relatives and neighbours. We have arranged a dinner party and want to share this special moment with the people we care about and love. I have also planned to arrange a music show which would make the event more enjoyable. I hope you would not mind the concert! I would feel very delighted if you could join the party. My apology for any inconvenience it might cause to you, but I assure you that I have already made arrangements to make it less noisy by a plan to conduct games for children and keep them engaged. We will also place soundproof coverage at the entrance of my house. Hope you will accept my invitation and join the party. Yours sincerely, Priya Roy
Dear Ms
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Meena
,

I am Priya and I have recently
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moved
with my family into the
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house
next
to yours. I am a doctor and I
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live
with my daughter, and husband, who is a lawyer.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have planned to throw a party and invite
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some
guests on the 10th of June and I would
really
appreciate your presence at that party.

Since this is the
first
time our family is moving into a
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house
that we
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own
, we have planned to throw a party and invite
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some
friends, colleagues, relatives and
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neighbours
. We have arranged a dinner party and want to share this special moment with the
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people
we care about and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
. I have
also
planned to arrange a music
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show
which would
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make
the
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event
more enjoyable. I hope you would not mind the concert!
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would feel
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very
delighted if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the party.

My apology for any inconvenience it might cause to you,
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but
I assure you that I have already made arrangements to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it less noisy by a plan to conduct games for children and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
them engaged. We will
also
place soundproof coverage at the entrance of my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

Hope you will accept my invitation and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the party.

Yours
sincerely
,

Priya Roy
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
211 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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