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You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently a new neighbour moved in and has been making a lot of noise, which disturbs you. v.2

You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently a new neighbour moved in and has been making a lot of noise, which disturbs you. v. 2
Dear Mr William, Hope this letter finds you in good health and spirit. I am writing this letter to you in order to bring your attention to an unpleasant issue that I have been facing lately. Anyway, I just wanted to let you know that one of your tenants, who has recently moved into apartment 5-D, has been making a lot of noises. Not to mention, these noises become only louder during the night time, especially, when I try to sleep. By the way, it is not only me, but even other tenants of the same flood are complaining about it. And we tried to talk to him politely about the noise issue, but the loud music and loud arguments over the phone only keep growing. Anyway, I am sorry to sound like complaining too much, but the noise is bothering me severely since I can’t sleep at night. Therefore, I would highly appreciate it if you could please ask our new neighbour not to make any noise after 8. 00 at night. But, if that doesn’t work, please allow me to move to another apartment which is on a different floor. Yours sincerely, Rick Tyson
Dear Mr William,

Hope this letter finds you in
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good
health and spirit. I am writing this letter to you in order to bring your attention to an unpleasant issue that I have been facing lately.

Anyway, I
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just
wanted to
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let
you know that one of your tenants, who has recently
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moved
into apartment 5-D, has been making
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a lot of
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noises
. Not to mention, these
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noises
become
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only
louder during the
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night time
,
especially
, when I try to sleep. By the way, it is not
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only
me,
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but
even other tenants of the same flood are complaining about it. And we tried to talk to him
politely
about the
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noise
issue,
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but
the loud music and loud arguments over the phone
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only
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keep
growing. Anyway, I am sorry to sound like complaining too much,
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but
the
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noise
is bothering me
severely
since I can’t sleep at night.

Therefore
, I would
highly
appreciate it if you could
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please
ask our new
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neighbour
not to
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make
any
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noise
after 8. 00 at night.
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But
, if that doesn’t work,
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please
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allow
me to
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move
to another apartment which is on a
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different
floor.

Yours
sincerely
,

Rick Tyson
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently a new neighbour moved in and has been making a lot of noise, which disturbs you. v. 2

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  American English
6 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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