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You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. v.1

You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. v. 1
Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson, I am your next-door neighbour and we have recently moved into this house. I regret that I did not get the opportunity to be acquainted with you. In fact, we are a family of three - me, my wife and our 8 years old son. We are planning to hold a party next Monday and would like to invite you. My son’s birthday will be on next Monday. Hence, my spouse and I have decided to celebrate this special occasion and invite some friends and relatives. The party will commence at 7: 00 pm and continue till midnight. It will consist of some music and dancing in which a local music band will perform. The dinner will be served at around 08: 00 pm in the garden and the concert will be held afterwards. Although the participants are comparatively limited, we are afraid the noises from the music performance might disturb you. We apologize in advance for any inconvenience created by this. I initially intended to invite you and your family to the party over the phone, but I hesitated whether it could be a good idea or not. My wife suggested that it would be more appropriate if I write a letter to do so. We will be genuinely pleased if you kindly accept our invitation to our beloved son's birthday ceremony. This way, we will not only find the chance to become familiar but enjoy the occasion together. Best Regards, Ali Kazemian
Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson,

I am your
next
-door
neighbour and
we have recently
moved
into this
house
. I regret that I did not
get
the opportunity to
be acquainted
with you. In fact, we are a family of three
-
me, my wife and our 8 years
old
son. We are planning to hold a party
next
Monday and would like to invite you.

My son’s birthday will be on
next
Monday.
Hence
, my spouse and I have decided to celebrate this special occasion and invite
some
friends and relatives. The party will commence at 7: 00 pm and continue till midnight. It will consist of
some
music and dancing in which a local music band will perform. The dinner will
be served
at around 08: 00 pm in the garden and the concert will
be held
afterwards. Although the participants are
comparatively
limited, we are afraid the noises from the music performance might disturb you. We apologize in advance for any inconvenience created by this.

I
initially
intended to invite you and your family to the party over the phone,
but
I hesitated whether it could be a
good
idea
or not. My wife suggested that it would be more appropriate if I write a letter to do
so
.

We will be
genuinely
pleased
if you kindly accept our invitation to our beloved son's birthday ceremony. This way, we will not
only
find the chance to become familiar
but
enjoy the occasion together.

Best Regards,

Ali
Kazemian
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
248 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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