Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson,
I am your next-door neighbour and we have recently moved into this house. I regret that I did not get the opportunity to be acquainted with you. In fact, we are a family of three - me, my wife and our 8 years old son. We are planning to hold a party next Monday and would like to invite you.
My son’s birthday will be on next Monday. Hence, my spouse and I have decided to celebrate this special occasion and invite some friends and relatives. The party will commence at 7: 00 pm and continue till midnight. It will consist of some music and dancing in which a local music band will perform. The dinner will be served at around 08: 00 pm in the garden and the concert will be held afterwards. Although the participants are comparatively limited, we are afraid the noises from the music performance might disturb you. We apologize in advance for any inconvenience created by this.
I initially intended to invite you and your family to the party over the phone, but I hesitated whether it could be a good idea or not. My wife suggested that it would be more appropriate if I write a letter to do so.
We will be genuinely pleased if you kindly accept our invitation to our beloved son's birthday ceremony. This way, we will not only find the chance to become familiar but enjoy the occasion together.
Best Regards,
Ali Kazemian
Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson,
I am your  
next
-door  
neighbour and
 we have recently  
moved
 into this  
house
. I regret that I did not  
get
 the opportunity to  
be acquainted
 with you. In fact, we are a family of three  
-
 me, my wife and our 8 years  
old
 son. We are planning to hold a party  
next
 Monday and would like to invite you.
My son’s birthday will be on  
next
 Monday.  
Hence
, my spouse and I have decided to celebrate this special occasion and invite  
some
 friends and relatives. The party will commence at 7: 00 pm and continue till midnight. It will consist of  
some
 music and dancing in which a local music band will perform. The dinner will  
be served
 at around 08: 00 pm in the garden and the concert will  
be held
 afterwards. Although the participants are  
comparatively
 limited, we are afraid the noises from the music performance might disturb you. We apologize in advance for any inconvenience created by this.
I  
initially
 intended to invite you and your family to the party over the phone,  
but
 I hesitated whether it could be a  
good
  idea
 or not. My wife suggested that it would be more appropriate if I write a letter to do  
so
.
We will be  
genuinely
  pleased
 if you kindly accept our invitation to our beloved son's birthday ceremony. This way, we will not  
only
 find the chance to become familiar  
but
 enjoy the occasion together.
Best Regards,
Ali  
Kazemian
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes