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You have got a good offer from another company but you have declined the offer. Write a letter to the HR Manager explaining the reason why you do not want to leave your present organization etc. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as v.2

You have got a good offer from another company but you have declined the offer. Write a letter to the HR Manager explaining the reason why you do not want to leave your present organization etc. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as v. 2
Dear Sir, At the outset, I would like to take this opportunity to express my gratitude for offering me a position in your esteemed organization. I must acknowledge that who interview process was well organized and smooth. Following your offer, I discussed the situation with my manager and requested to plan for my release in next month but when Tom (my manger) talked to senior HR manager about my replacement, he expressed that suitable replacement may take time as company has stopped the recruitment for this quarter. As I explained in interview that critical work is being done by me and team and since I am leading the project, it may jeopardize the success of the project. Today morning, I was called by Vice president and he not only requested me to stay back but also elaborated the future plan of project and my career. Though I have no obligation to withdraw the resignation, I feel that all my departure at this junction may wash out all hard-work done by me and team. Thereby, I decided to stay-back at current organization. I truly understand your positon but I hope that you would also appreciate the decision which I have taken in favor of company. I apologize for inconvenience caused and hope to work with you and your company in future. Yours faithfully, Zack
Dear Sir,

At the outset, I would like to take this opportunity to express my gratitude for offering me a position in your esteemed organization. I
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must
acknowledge that who interview process was well organized and smooth.

Following your offer, I discussed the situation with my manager and requested to plan for my release in
next
month
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
when Tom (my manger) talked to senior HR manager about my replacement, he expressed that suitable replacement may take time as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
the recruitment for this quarter.

As I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
in interview that critical work is
being done
by me and team and since I am leading the project, it may jeopardize the success of the project.
This is a non-standard collocation. Normally, "this morning" is used.
Today morning
, I
was called
by Vice
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
president and
he not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
requested me to stay back
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
elaborated the future plan of project and my career.

Though I have no obligation to withdraw the resignation, I feel that all my departure at this junction may wash out all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
-work done by me and team. Thereby, I decided to stay-back at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
organization.

I
truly
understand your
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positon
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I hope that you would
also
appreciate the decision which I have taken in favor of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. I apologize for inconvenience caused and hope to work with you and your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Zack
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have got a good offer from another company but you have declined the offer. Write a letter to the HR Manager explaining the reason why you do not want to leave your present organization etc. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
222 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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