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A friend is staying in your flat in your absence. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter* Tell him where he/she can find the key. * Ask him to look after something important. *Instruct him on what to do on your day of return. v.2

A friend is staying in your flat in your absence. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter* Tell him where he/she can find the key. * Ask him to look after something important. *Instruct him on what to do on your day of return. v. 2
Dear Babu, Thank you for accepting my invitation to stay at my flat in October. I am grateful that you have managed an entire month for me and surprised that your family is so supportive. Having you at my home during my training abroad will make me feel so much relieved. However, you need to know some way around my apartment as you are going to stay there for a while. When you arrive, if I am not there, please look for the key under the mattress. I have left detailed instructions on the refrigerator, which will come in handy if you cannot find anything once you are inside the house. As you know, the primary reason I requested you to stay at the apartment in my stead is to feed my cat. She responds by the name Mittens and you like her very much as far as I can remember. I have also left notes about how to feed her on the fridge. You will find her food on the top shelf in the kitchen. You will see that a cleaner will come every day in the morning to clean up the floors and furniture. Please remind him to clean the bathrooms on my day of return, which will be on 1st November. Hope you find your stay enjoyable! Your friend, Shadip
Dear
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Babu
,

Thank you for accepting my invitation to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
at my flat in October. I am grateful that you have managed an entire month for me and surprised that your family is
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so
supportive. Having you at my home during my training abroad will
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make
me feel
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so
much relieved.

However
, you need to know
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some
way around my apartment as you are going to
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stay
there for a while. When you arrive, if I am not there,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
look for the key under the mattress. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
detailed instructions on the refrigerator, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
in handy if you cannot find anything once you are inside the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

As you know, the primary reason I requested you to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
at the apartment in my stead is to feed my cat. She responds by the name Mittens and you like her
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much as far as I can remember. I have
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
notes about how to feed her on the fridge. You will find her food on the top shelf in the kitchen.

You will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
that a cleaner will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
every day in the morning to clean up the floors and furniture.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
remind him to clean the bathrooms on my day of return, which will be on 1st November.

Hope you find your
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stay
enjoyable!

Your friend,

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Shadip
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter A friend is staying in your flat in your absence. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter* Tell him where he/she can find the key. * Ask him to look after something important. *Instruct him on what to do on your day of return. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
222 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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