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you have brought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago, but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: Intro v.2

you have brought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago, but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: Intro v. 2
To Whom It May Concern, My name is Valli, and I have been a customer of your company for several years. I have confidently shopped at your premises, knowing that I would be completely taken care of in the event of a potential problem. However, I have recently faced a predicament in dealing with your company that disappointed me greatly. To make a long story short, I had purchased a camera from your store, but upon taking it home and unboxing it, I found it to be faulty. Realizing that there always a probability of finding a faulty item at any store, I returned the camera for repair, relying on your company' s immaculate after-sales services. To my chagrin, however, I am yet to hear back from the store and it has been a week since I have last spoken to them. This is unfortunate that a great company like yours is damaging its reputation through potential errors of its representatives. I will be delighted if you either send me a new camera or refund me the entire sum I had paid for this faulty paraphernalia. If possible, get back to me at your earliest convenience. Regards, Valli
To Whom It May Concern,

My name is
Valli
, and I have been a customer of your
company
for several years. I have
confidently
shopped at your premises, knowing that I would be completely taken care of in the
event
of a potential problem.

However
, I have recently faced a predicament in dealing with your
company
that disappointed me
greatly
. To
make
a long story short, I had
purchased
a camera from your store,
but
upon taking it home and unboxing it, I found it to be faulty. Realizing that there always a probability of finding a faulty item at any store, I returned the camera for repair, relying on your
company&
#039; s immaculate after-sales services. To my chagrin,
however
, I am
yet
to hear back from the store and it has been a week since I have last spoken to them.

This is unfortunate that a great
company
like yours is damaging its reputation through potential errors of its representatives. I will
be delighted
if you either
send
me a new camera or refund me the entire sum I had paid for this faulty paraphernalia. If possible,
get
back to me at your earliest convenience.

Regards,

Valli
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter you have brought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago, but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: Intro v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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