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You have an extra room in your apartment and would like to rent it out to a student. v.3

You have an extra room in your apartment and would like to rent it out to a student. v. 3
Dear Mr Hassan, I am writing with regard to your advertisement in the New York Times which stated that people should contact you to rent out rooms to students from your university. I would be grateful if you could arrange a tenant for my extra room. I own a flat in Manhattan and it is on the 10th avenue. My flat is located on the 4th floor and it is quite spacious. It contains 2 moderately large bedrooms, a storage room, a kitchen, and 2 bathrooms. In addition, it is fully furnished with branded furniture and household appliances. I live alone in this apartment and use one bedroom while the second bedroom has no use for me. This is why I have decided to lease it out to someone. The rent is $450 per month including utility bills. The tenant must be a polite person and a non-smoker. Additionally, he should not have frequent guests and parties. I am sure the prospective student will feel comfortable in this accommodation. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours cordially, Fadi Al-Damiri
Dear Mr Hassan,

I am writing with regard to your advertisement in the New York Times which stated that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should contact you to rent out rooms to students from your university. I would be grateful if you could arrange a tenant for my extra room.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
a flat in Manhattan and it is on the 10th avenue. My flat
is located
on the 4th floor and it is quite spacious. It contains 2
moderately
large bedrooms, a storage room, a kitchen, and 2 bathrooms.
In addition
, it is
fully
furnished with branded furniture and household appliances. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
alone in this apartment and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
one bedroom while the second bedroom has no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
for me. This is why I have decided to lease it out to someone.

The rent is $450 per month including utility bills. The tenant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be a polite person and a non-smoker.
Additionally
, he should not have frequent guests and parties. I am sure the prospective student will feel comfortable in this accommodation.

I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
cordially
,

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Fadi
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Al-Damiri
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You have an extra room in your apartment and would like to rent it out to a student. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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