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Your new neighbours have recently invited you to a party they are holding next Saturday. However, you have other plans on Saturday evening and cannot attend the party. v.2

Your new neighbours have recently invited you to a party they are holding next Saturday. However, you have other plans on Saturday evening and cannot attend the party. v. 2
Dear Mr and Mrs Arthur, I would like to thank you for inviting us to the party you are holding at your home next Saturday. We are honoured to be invited. However, a prescheduled plan deter us from attending this much-welcomed party and I am hoping that we can meet some other day. I am sorry that we will have to be at the local airport to receive our uncle and his family on that very Saturday evening. They are travelling from Italy to meet us and they are expected to land at 7. 30 pm. We have assured them that we will be at the airport and there is no way we can alter the schedule. They will be visiting Canada for the first time and expecting us to escort them to our house. I wish we could have been at your home to enjoy the party and get to know some of your relatives. Hopefully, we will do that some other time. We can meet you on a weekend and have some quality time together. Please let me know when you can do that. Wishing you a grand party and quality time with your guests. Sincerely yours, Martin Cammy
Dear Mr and Mrs Arthur,

I would like to thank you for inviting us to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
you are holding at your home
next
Saturday. We are
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honoured
to
be invited
.
However
, a
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prescheduled
plan deter us from attending this much-welcomed
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
party and
I am hoping that we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other day.

I am sorry that we will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be at the local airport to receive our uncle and his family on that
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very
Saturday evening. They are travelling from Italy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
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us and
they are
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expected
to land at 7. 30 pm. We have assured them that we will be at the airport and there is no way we can alter the schedule. They will be visiting Canada for the
first
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time
and expecting us to escort them to our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

I wish we could have been at your home to enjoy the
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party
and
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get
to know
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of your relatives.
Hopefully
, we will do that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. We can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you on a weekend and have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
quality
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
together.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know when you can do that.

Wishing you a grand
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
and quality
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
with your guests.

Sincerely
yours,

Martin
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Cammy
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your new neighbours have recently invited you to a party they are holding next Saturday. However, you have other plans on Saturday evening and cannot attend the party. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
200 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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