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You have an extra room in your apartment and would like to rent it out to a student. v.2

You have an extra room in your apartment and would like to rent it out to a student. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Nathan Adam, a mathematics major at the Aura Vincent University. I want to rent out a spare room in my apartment and need your help regarding this. As per the university policy, any students willing to lease a room to another student should first notify the council office. I want to rent out a room at the Central  Library Road, Okalum Berry, AV -123. The apartment is on the 7th floor and has a lift, Wi-Fi internet connection, water heater facilities and electric cooker. The room is fully furnished and has an attached bathroom. I have a tenant agreement with the flat owner and I have to pay 210 dollars per week. The apartment has three rooms and one room is completely vacant. I thought to sublease the room to someone who would share the rent. Moreover, a student from my university would be a good companion for me. The student who is interested to occupy the room should be a science major. He should rent it at least for six months and pay two-months' advance payment. I am looking for someone who is serious about the study and has a good academic track. I am really looking forward to getting your help to rent out the room to a suitable student from our university. Yours faithfully, Nathan Adam
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Nathan Adam, a mathematics major at the Aura Vincent University. I want to
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rent
out a spare
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room
in my apartment and need your
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help
regarding this.

As per the university policy, any
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students
willing to lease a
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room
to another
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student
should
first
notify the council office. I want to
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rent
out a
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room
at the Central
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Library Road,
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Okalum
Berry, AV -123. The apartment is on the 7th floor and has a lift, Wi-Fi internet connection, water heater facilities and electric cooker. The
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room
is
fully
furnished and has an attached bathroom.

I have a tenant agreement with the flat owner and I
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have to
pay 210 dollars per week. The apartment has three
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rooms
and one
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room
is completely vacant. I
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thought
to sublease the
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room
to someone who would share the
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rent
.
Moreover
, a
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student
from my university would be a
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good
companion for me.

The
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student
who
is interested
to occupy the
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room
should be a science major. He should
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rent
it at least for six months and pay two-months' advance payment. I am looking for someone who is serious about the study and has a
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good
academic
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track
.

I am
really
looking forward to getting your
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help
to
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rent
out the
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room
to a suitable
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student
from our university.

Yours
faithfully
,

Nathan Adam
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19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You have an extra room in your apartment and would like to rent it out to a student. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
224 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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