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You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. v.10

You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. v. 10
Dear Mary, It's been long since I have heard from you. Hope you are doing great. I am writing this letter to request some information about the courses offered at different colleges in Brisbane. I am planning to intake a course and would really appreciate your help. After completing my postgraduation in chemistry, I have been working as a chemist in one of the best laboratories in India - Dania Lab. My regular duties involve analysing the quality of food products as well as to check whether they meet the NABL prescribed standards. As my employer is highly pleased with my performance, he has asked me if I am ready to take on a new responsibility, which is related to molecular modelling. I do not have much expertise in that field, so, I would like to join a molecular designing course in Australia, more specifically in Brisbane in a couple of months. I would be thankful to you if you search and inform me of the details of the appropriate institution with relevant contact numbers. Please take the burden to personally visit some reputed colleges and talk to them regarding the course. I barely know anyone there and would really appreciate your help. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Warm wishes, Rahul
Dear Mary,

It's been long since I have heard from you. Hope you are doing great. I am writing this letter to request
some
information about the
courses
offered at
different
colleges in Brisbane. I am planning to intake a
course
and would
really
appreciate your
help
.

After completing my
postgraduation
in chemistry, I have been working as a chemist in one of the best laboratories in India
-
Dania Lab. My regular duties involve
analysing
the quality of food products
as well
as to
check
whether they
meet
the
NABL
prescribed standards. As my employer is
highly
pleased
with my performance, he has asked me if I am ready to take on a new responsibility, which
is related
to molecular modelling. I do not have much expertise in that field,
so
, I would like to
join
a molecular designing
course
in Australia, more
specifically
in Brisbane in a couple of months.

I would be thankful to you if you search and inform me of the
details
of the appropriate institution with relevant contact numbers.
Please
take the burden to
personally
visit
some
reputed colleges and talk to them regarding the
course
. I
barely
know anyone there and would
really
appreciate your
help
.

I look forward to hearing from you
soon
.

Warm wishes,

Rahul
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. v. 10

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
213 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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