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You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. v.13

You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. v. 13
Dear Mimi, Hope you are doing excellent. I regret that I haven't been in touch with you for a couple of months. I am really busy these days and I hardly have time to wind down. I am writing to let you know that I am planning to apply to Oxford University, which means we'll be living in the same city soon. I am expecting your assistance in getting some information regarding the course I am planning to pursue. As you know, ever since I have finished my Bachelor in Psychology, I have been working full time in the human resources department. I'm currently working as an HR consultant, but I am interested in organisational development. That's why I have decided to do a master's degree in ‘Organisational Psychology’. I am planning to submit my application to the university soon. However, I was recently assigned to work on a three-month project in Hongkong, so I don't know when I'll have the opportunity to contact the admission office. Do you mind contacting them to ask about their specific entry requirements? That would be a great help if you do. Take care and write me back sometime. Talk to you soon. Warm regards, Helen
Dear Mimi,

Hope you are doing excellent. I regret that I haven't been in touch with you for a couple of months. I am
really
busy these days and I hardly have time to wind down.
I
am writing to
let
you know that I am planning to apply to Oxford University, which means we'll be living in the same city
soon
.
I
am expecting your assistance in getting
some
information regarding the course I am planning to pursue.

As you know, ever since I have finished my Bachelor in Psychology, I have been working full time in the human resources department. I'm
currently
working as an HR consultant,
but
I
am interested
in
organisational
development. That's why I have decided to do a master's degree in ‘
Organisational
Psychology’.

I am planning to submit my application to the university
soon
.
However
, I was recently assigned to work on a three-month project in
Hongkong
,
so
I don't know when I'll have the opportunity to contact the admission office. Do you mind contacting them to ask about their specific entry requirements? That would be a great
help
if you do.

Take care and write me back sometime. Talk to you
soon
.

Warm regards,

Helen
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. v. 13

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
201 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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