Dear Mimi,
Hope you are doing excellent. I regret that I haven't been in touch with you for a couple of months. I am really busy these days and I hardly have time to wind down. I am writing to let you know that I am planning to apply to Oxford University, which means we'll be living in the same city soon. I am expecting your assistance in getting some information regarding the course I am planning to pursue.
As you know, ever since I have finished my Bachelor in Psychology, I have been working full time in the human resources department. I'm currently working as an HR consultant, but I am interested in organisational development. That's why I have decided to do a master's degree in ‘Organisational Psychology’.
I am planning to submit my application to the university soon. However, I was recently assigned to work on a three-month project in Hongkong, so I don't know when I'll have the opportunity to contact the admission office. Do you mind contacting them to ask about their specific entry requirements? That would be a great help if you do.
Take care and write me back sometime. Talk to you soon.
Warm regards,
Helen
Dear Mimi,
Hope you are doing excellent. I regret that I haven't been in touch with you for a couple of months. I am
really
busy these days and I hardly have time to wind down.
I
am writing to
let
you know that I am planning to apply to Oxford University, which means we'll be living in the same city
soon
.
I
am expecting your assistance in getting
some
information regarding the course I am planning to pursue.
As you know, ever since I have finished my Bachelor in Psychology, I have been working full time in the human resources department. I'm
currently
working as an HR consultant,
but
I
am interested
in
organisational
development. That's why I have decided to do a master's degree in ‘
Organisational
Psychology’.
I am planning to submit my application to the university
soon
.
However
, I was recently assigned to work on a three-month project in
Hongkong
,
so
I don't know when I'll have the opportunity to contact the admission office. Do you mind contacting them to ask about their specific entry requirements? That would be a great
help
if you do.
Take care and write me back sometime. Talk to you
soon
.
Warm regards,
Helen
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