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You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. v.14

You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. v. 14
Dear Sam, Hope you are fine. I am now in Vizag and working for a large architectural consultancy firm. In order to accelerate my professional and personal growth, I need to complete a course pertaining to architectural design. I am hoping you would be able to provide details on some renowned colleges that offer the courses and guide me chose one. It is well known that Dubai undertakes excellent construction projects, and colleges there offer outstanding architectural and designing courses too. As you are studying and residing in Dubai, I request you to kindly apprise me of the architectural courses offered by colleges. I am relying on you to pick a course at a college. I request you to kindly examine the content of the course, its duration, the course curriculum, the cost and finally the placement opportunities after completion of the course. It would immensely help me in analysing and picking up the right course from the right institution. I would be grateful for the information and support. I will be waiting for your reply in this regard. Warm wishes, Talluri
Dear Sam,

Hope you are fine. I am
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now
in
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Vizag
and working for a large architectural consultancy firm. In order to accelerate my professional and personal growth, I need to complete a
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course
pertaining to architectural design. I am hoping you would be able to provide
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details
on
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some
renowned colleges that offer the
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courses
and guide me chose one.

It is well known that Dubai undertakes excellent construction projects, and colleges there offer outstanding architectural and designing
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courses
too. As you are studying and residing in Dubai, I request you to kindly apprise me of the architectural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
offered by colleges. I am relying on you to pick a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
at a college.

I request you to kindly examine the content of the
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course
, its duration, the
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course
curriculum, the cost and
finally
the placement opportunities after completion of the
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course
. It would
immensely
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help
me in
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analysing
and picking up the right
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course
from the right institution.

I would be grateful for the information and support. I will be waiting for your reply in this regard.

Warm wishes,

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Talluri
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. v. 14

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
181 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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