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You had just missed a friend’s party, white a letter apologizing and stating reasons why you could not attend the party. ask how fun was it v.2

You had just missed a friend’s party, white a letter apologizing and stating reasons why you could not attend the party. ask how fun was it v. 2
Dear Anna, I’m overwhelmed to know that you get your soul mate. I know that your engagement party was one of the most important events of your life and you could understand that how much it was painful and depressing for me to not join. I was extremely excited to attend your party, selected a fabulous evening gown too with matching red stilettos and accessories. But as you know, my office life is really busy these days, working with foreign client on a project to streamline their management reporting and regulatory accounts. They could not convert the project into the process and had technical issues. My boss wanted me to leave on the next flight to smooth out the streaming issue. I hope you will forgive me. Anyway, I am dying to know every detail of the party down to each minute. I want you to send me loads of pictures, especially you and the groom with all of your friends and family. I hope to hear from you ASAP. Don’t forget to send snaps on my email ID. Best wishes, SAIRA
Dear Anna,

I’m overwhelmed to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
that you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
your soul mate. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
that your engagement party was one of the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
of your life and you could understand that how much it was painful and depressing for me to not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was
extremely
excited to attend your party, selected a fabulous evening gown too with matching red stilettos and accessories.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
as you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
, my office life is
really
busy these days, working with foreign client on a project to streamline their management reporting and regulatory accounts. They could not convert the project into the process and had technical issues. My boss wanted me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
on the
next
flight to smooth out the streaming issue. I hope you will forgive me.

Anyway, I am dying to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
every detail of the party down to each minute. I want you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me loads of pictures,
especially
you and the groom with all of your friends and family.

I hope to hear from you ASAP. Don’t forget to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
snaps on my email ID.

Best wishes,

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SAIRA
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You had just missed a friend’s party, white a letter apologizing and stating reasons why you could not attend the party. ask how fun was it v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
181 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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