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You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v.9

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v. 9
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to thank you for the fantastic food and service you offered to us on my birthday that we celebrated at your restaurant. I hope you will offer the praiseworthy service in the future and I must say you have won my heart as a guest. I went to your restaurant on 09 December with a few friends of mine to celebrate my birthday and all of us were very impressed with the overall experience. The food was delicious and well presented. I must mention the “Chicken Tandoori” dish that was served to us was the star of the evening, cooked to perfection and absolutely mind-blowing. I really enjoyed the live music that was being played - it lightened up the whole ambience. I also liked the “Retro Theme” in the restaurant. We were very pleased with the service; all the staff members were friendly, attentive and served us with a smile. Our waiter also made a few recommendations for drinks, which were good and something we enjoyed. I would like to recommend an improvement - as your restaurant is a non-smoking zone, it would be great if you could have a separate smoking area thus smokers will feel more comfortable. I am sure your customers will like this arrangement. Thank you once again for making my birthday party memorable. My friends and I enjoyed it thoroughly. I will definitely recommend your restaurant to my friends and family. Yours faithfully, Anna Preeti
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to thank you for the fantastic food and service you offered to us on my birthday that we celebrated at your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
. I hope you will offer the praiseworthy service in the future and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
say you have won my heart as a guest.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
went to your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
on 09 December with a few friends of mine to celebrate my birthday and all of us were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
impressed with the
overall
experience. The food was delicious and well presented. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
mention the “Chicken Tandoori” dish that
was served
to us was the star of the evening, cooked to perfection and
absolutely
mind-blowing.

I
really
enjoyed the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
music that was
being played
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
it lightened up the whole ambience.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
also
liked the “Retro Theme” in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
. We were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
pleased
with the service; all the staff members were friendly, attentive and served us with a smile. Our waiter
also
made a few recommendations for drinks, which were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and something we enjoyed.

I would like to recommend an improvement
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
as your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
is a non-smoking zone, it would be great if you could have a separate smoking area
thus
smokers will feel more comfortable. I am sure your customers will like this arrangement.

Thank you once again for making my birthday party memorable. My friends and I enjoyed it
thoroughly
.

I will definitely recommend your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
to my friends and family.

Yours
faithfully
,

Anna Preeti
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v. 9

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
247 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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