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You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v.11

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v. 11
Dear Sir or Madam, Last week I celebrated my 31st birthday at your restaurant and I am writing to express my appreciation regarding the service we were offered. It gives me immense pleasure to thank you all for letting us enjoy the party from the very beginning. The interior and the atmosphere in the restaurant was commendable. It uplifted our mood and inspired us to enjoy to the fullest. Besides, all of your staff, right from the welcome guy to the stewardess, were so cordial that we felt a homely appeal. Needless to mention, the party was an excellent memoir to be remembered for a long. The food tasted delicious and they were properly cooked and presented. I was so happy when my friends quoted that they had an excellent dish and ate up to their full stomach. I would not hesitate to recommend your establishment to any food lover. I, take this opportunity to mark this letter as a token of appreciation for the success of the birthday party. However, I would like to mention that you need to enhance the washroom as it is a bit smaller compared to the number of guests you entertain. Thanking you once again for everything you have done to make my birthday party a success. Yours faithfully, Prasadarao Talluri
Dear Sir or Madam,

Last week I celebrated my 31st birthday at your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
restaurant and
I am writing to express my appreciation regarding the service we
were offered
. It gives me immense pleasure to thank you all for letting us enjoy the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
from the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beginning.

The interior and the atmosphere in the restaurant was commendable. It uplifted our mood and inspired us to enjoy to the fullest.
Besides
, all of your staff, right from the welcome guy to the stewardess, were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
cordial that we felt a homely appeal. Needless to mention, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
was an excellent memoir to
be remembered
for a long.

The food tasted
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
delicious and
they were
properly
cooked and presented. I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
happy when my friends quoted that they had an excellent dish and ate up to their full stomach. I would not hesitate to recommend your establishment to any food lover.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
, take this opportunity to mark this letter as a token of appreciation for the success of the birthday
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
.
However
, I would like to mention that you need to enhance the washroom as it is a bit smaller compared to the number of guests you entertain.

Thanking you once again for everything you have done to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
my birthday
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
a success.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Prasadarao
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Talluri
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v. 11

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
216 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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