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You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v.2

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my gratitude for the service you offered on 30th December when I visited your restaurant along with my friends to celebrate my birthday. It was one of the most memorable birthday events in my life and your staff made it even more special by offering a complimentary birthday cake. You have definitely won me as one of your permanent customers and I would love to recommend your restaurant to my acquaintances. The atmosphere inside the restaurant was very soothing and relaxing. Beautiful interior and wonderful and accurately placed lighting system - neither too bright nor too dim make this place a perfect spot for celebrations. The taste of the food was just out of the world. Allow me to say that you made me nostalgic as the food tasted similar to what my mother cooks for me back at home, though this made me miss my home and mother more! However, I have a suggestion to make. You may think of introducing some discount cards or offer some corporate discounts to the people of the nearby area. This, I believe, would make our dine-outs more pocket-friendly. I hope that you would consider this suggestion. Once again, big thanks to you and your staff for making my birthday more distinctive. Yours faithfully, Pooja Gupta
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my gratitude for the service you offered on 30th December when I visited your restaurant along with my friends to celebrate my birthday. It was one of the most memorable birthday
events
in my life and your staff made it even more special by offering a complimentary birthday cake.

You have definitely won me as one of your permanent customers and I would
love
to recommend your restaurant to my acquaintances. The atmosphere inside the restaurant was
very
soothing and relaxing.
Beautiful
interior and wonderful and
accurately
placed lighting system
-
neither too bright nor too dim
make
this place a perfect spot for celebrations. The taste of the food was
just
out of the world.
Allow
me to say that you made me nostalgic as the food tasted similar to what my mother cooks for me back at home, though this made me miss my home and mother more!

However
, I have a suggestion to
make
. You may
think
of introducing
some
discount cards or offer
some
corporate discounts to the
people
of the nearby area. This, I believe, would
make
our dine-outs more pocket-friendly.

I hope that you would consider this suggestion. Once again,
big
thanks to you and your staff for making my birthday more distinctive.

Yours
faithfully
,

Pooja
Gupta
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v. 2

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  American English
7 paragraphs
221 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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