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You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v.3

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, Last week, I along with a few of my friends enjoyed a dinner party at your restaurant to celebrate my 21st birthday. I am writing to thank you for a delightful evening that we had. All my friends thoroughly enjoyed the food and were pleased with the friendly attitude of your staff. We ordered a Chinese menu and it was delicious. We received prompt service and the waiters were quite friendly. They put with well with our bad jokes! The restaurant itself was warm and friendly and the atmosphere showed that all the diners there were enjoying their evening. I believe you have a great place and a small improvement would make it even better. Two of my friends are vegetarian and they felt that the choice for vegetarians was not sufficient. I am hoping you would consider adding a few more items for the vegetarians who would visit your restaurant. Once again I would like to thank you for making my birthday celebration special and worth enjoying. Yours faithfully, Kelvin Smith
Dear Sir or Madam,

Last week, I along with a few of my friends enjoyed a dinner party at your restaurant to celebrate my 21st birthday. I am writing to thank you for a delightful evening that we had.

All my friends
thoroughly
enjoyed the food and were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
pleased
with the friendly attitude of your staff. We ordered a Chinese menu and it was delicious. We received prompt service and the waiters were quite friendly. They put with well with our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
jokes! The restaurant itself was warm and friendly and the atmosphere
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that all the diners there were enjoying their evening.

I believe you have a great place and a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
improvement would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it even better. Two of my friends are
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
vegetarian and
they felt that the choice for vegetarians was not sufficient. I am hoping you would consider adding a few more items for the vegetarians who would visit your restaurant.

Once again I would like to thank you for making my birthday celebration special and worth enjoying.

Yours
faithfully
,

Kelvin Smith
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
175 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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