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You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v.4

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to thank you for a fantastic and memorable evening for me and my friends at your restaurant. I would love to see you continue offering such appreciating dining experience to your guests and wish remarkable success to your business. As you know, last week I celebrated my 27th birthday with my friends at your restaurant which turned out to be a great success. Everyone enjoyed the arrangement at the poolside and the decoration of sparkling lights with soft and soothing background music. Coming to the food, the presentation was as mouthwatering as the food itself. The service was fabulous too. I am very satisfied with your hospitality. However, I have a suggestion to make. A few friends of mine attended my birthday party with their children. So if you could have added some interesting games for them that would have made the party more interesting. I believe it would be very convenient for other people with children. I once again thank you for your admirable service. Yours faithfully, Mansoor Afzal
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to thank you for a fantastic and memorable evening for me and my friends at your restaurant. I would
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love
to
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see
you continue offering such appreciating dining experience to your guests and wish remarkable success to your business.

As you know, last week I celebrated my 27th birthday with my friends at your restaurant which turned out to be a great success. Everyone enjoyed the arrangement at the poolside and the decoration of sparkling lights with soft and soothing background music. Coming to the food, the presentation was as mouthwatering as the food itself. The service was fabulous too.

I am
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very
satisfied with your hospitality.
However
, I have a suggestion to
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make
. A few friends of mine attended my birthday party with their children.
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So
if you could have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
interesting games for them that would have made the party more interesting. I believe it would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
convenient for other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
with children.

I once again thank you for your admirable service.

Yours
faithfully
,

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IELTS letter You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. v. 4

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  American English
7 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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