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Writing task 1You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost v.2

Writing task 1You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost v. 2
Dear sir or madam, I, Neelam Macwan, am writing this letter for asking a help in a personal matter. I have read an article about a social worker named Mary Smith in the extra addition of your newspaper ' New York Times' dated 05/03/2019. Mary is my childhood friend with whom I had lost contact several years ago. Mary and I were living in the same neighborhood and we went to same school, we were really close friends and spent much time together after school hours. However, we had to depart after high school because of her family moved out of the town due to unemployment. We were in the touch by telephone for a while after that but gradually lost the contact as platforms like Facebook and WhatsApp were not available. This led to total disconnection between us. So I would like to request if you can give Mary' s contact number or address because she is not on Facebook. Moreover, please approach her and let her know that I am looking forward to meeting her. I am sure this is not a lot to ask. I am awaiting for your positive response. Best regards, Neelam Macwan
Dear sir or madam,

I,
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Neelam
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Macwan
,
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am
writing this letter for asking a
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help
in a personal matter. I have read an article about a social worker named Mary Smith in the extra addition of your newspaper ' New York
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Times&
#039; dated 05/03/2019. Mary is my childhood friend with whom I had lost contact several years ago.

Mary and I were living in the same
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neighborhood and
we went to same school, we were
really
close friends and spent much time together after school hours.
However
, we had to depart after high school
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because
of her family
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moved
out of the town due to unemployment. We were in the touch by telephone for a while after that
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but
gradually
lost the contact as platforms like Facebook and WhatsApp were not available. This led to total disconnection between us.

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So
I would like to request if you can give
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Mary&
#039; s contact number or address
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because
she is not on Facebook.
Moreover
,
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please
approach her and
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let
her know that I am looking forward to meeting her. I am sure this is not a lot to ask. I am
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awaiting for
your
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positive
response.

Best regards,

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Neelam
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Macwan
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter Writing task 1You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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