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You are writing your first letter to a pen pal. Describe your previous studies and work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her v.2

You are writing your first letter to a pen pal. Describe your previous studies and work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her v. 2
Dear Jenny, My name is Linh, 24 years old, from Vietnam. I am writing this letter to tell you a little bit about me and wonder if we can be a friend. Two years ago, I have graduated from University of Social Sciences and Humanities, specialized Journalism and Communication. Now I am a reporter of Vietnam Television which required me fluently work under time pressure. However, I still find it interesting due to I have a chance meet a great number of people from a different career which make me deeply understand about this life. About my hobbies, in my leisure time, I usually read books and magazines which make me recharge the battery after a serious period time study. Besides that, I also adore watching videos on Youtube to keep me posted, subscribing some foreigner Youtubers is beneficial for me to enhance my listening and speaking skill in a very relaxing way. I have a plan come to your country – the United States in April to take part in a conference. So why don’t we arrange an appointment to know more about each other? It would be grateful if you led me to visit your city. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Linh Bui
Dear Jenny,

My name is
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Linh
, 24 years
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old
, from Vietnam. I am writing this letter to
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tell
you a
Reduce redundancy by using "little" or "bit".
little bit
about me and wonder if we can be a friend.

Two years ago, I have graduated from University of Social Sciences and Humanities, specialized Journalism and Communication.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
I am a reporter of Vietnam Television which required me
fluently
work under time pressure.
However
, I
still
find it interesting due to I have a chance
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
a great number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
career which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
me
deeply
understand about this life.

About my hobbies, in my leisure time, I
usually
read books and magazines which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
me recharge the battery after a serious period time study.
Besides
that, I
also
adore watching videos on
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Youtube
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
me posted, subscribing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
foreigner
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Youtubers
is beneficial for me to enhance my listening and speaking
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
relaxing way. I have a plan
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to your country
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
the United States in April to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in a conference.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
why don’t we arrange an appointment to know more about each other? It would be grateful if you led me to visit your city. Looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Linh
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Bui
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are writing your first letter to a pen pal. Describe your previous studies and work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
208 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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