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You are organising an executive event for the company you work for. Write a letter to the person in charge of a venue that you are considering for the event and ask for detailed information regarding dates, services and costs. v.4

You are organising an executive event for the company you work for. Write a letter to the person in charge of a venue that you are considering for the event and ask for detailed information regarding dates, services and costs. v. 4

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that we are considering your banquet hall for our annual dinner party that we are planning to organise at the end of October 2020. Therefore, I would like to obtain a few information to finalise the process of reserving this venue. First of all, please notify me of the availability of the venue as per our schedule. Can we avail it on the evening of 28th or 29th October? I would also like to know about the service you offer including the dinner menu, power backup and decoration. As it is a prestigious event for our company, you should follow some decent theme for the decoration and provide a buffet menu. My recommendation is to use a professional interior decorator and the use of white flowers and colourful balloons for the decoration. Finally, please forward me the estimated expenses that will incur to hire the venue and avail the services. Send it to my email address - This email address is being protected from spambots. You need JavaScript enabled to view it. . Previous experience with your company was outstanding but this time, I am expecting more innovative design and high quality of services. Yours faithfully, Fahad Sultan

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you that we are considering your banquet hall for our annual dinner party that we are planning to Possible spelling mistake. 'organise' is British English.organize
organise
 at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of October 2020. Therefore
, I would like to obtain 'information' is a mass noun (i.e., uncountable). Therefore, the preceding 'a' is probably wrong.few information
a few information
 to Possible spelling mistake. 'finalise' is British English.finalize
finalise
 the process of reserving this venue.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 notify me of the availability of the venue as per our schedule. Can we avail it on the evening of 28th or 29th October? I would also
 like to know about the service you offer including the dinner menu, power backup and decoration. As it is a prestigious This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionhappening
event
 for our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
, you should follow This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 decent theme for the decoration and provide a buffet menu. My recommendation is to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 a professional interior decorator and the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 of white flowers and Possible spelling mistake. 'colourful' is British English.colorful
colourful
 balloons for the decoration.

Finally
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 forward me the estimated expenses that will incur to hire the venue and avail the services. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
Send
 it to my email address Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.—
-
 This email address is being protected
 from Possible spelling mistake found.spam bots
spambots
. You need JavaScript enabled to view it. Don't put a space before the full stop.
.
 Previous experience with your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 was outstanding This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 this time, I am expecting more innovative design and high quality of services.

Yours faithfully
,

Fahad Sultan

5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter You are organising an executive event for the company you work for. Write a letter to the person in charge of a venue that you are considering for the event and ask for detailed information regarding dates, services and costs. v. 4

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

207 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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