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You are organising an executive event for the company you work for. Write a letter to the person in charge of a venue that you are considering for the event and ask for detailed information regarding dates, services and costs. v.2

You are organising an executive event for the company you work for. Write a letter to the person in charge of a venue that you are considering for the event and ask for detailed information regarding dates, services and costs. v. 2

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inquire about your exclusive seminar hall that we are planning to reserve for an official event. We are expecting a few additional amenities in order to accommodate the event without any intervention and to make it a success. We will organise the annual get-together party and I would like to know the availability of your seminar hall during the second week of next March. Our agenda will be staff meet-up followed by an hour-long presentation and it would conclude with a grand dinner party. We would require a high-resolution LCD projector and the Wi-Fi connection facility for Laptops. The seating arrangement is expected to be for almost 100 people. We also require facilities for welcome drinks for guests and dinner for all of them. I am curious to know about the rates to hire the hall for 6 hours, from 4: 00 pm to 10: 00 pm, with the list of facilities it offers. Additionally, please send me the menu for dinner including drinks. Also, mention the best possible concession you can offer and break down the expected expenses. We will not compromise the hygienic and food quality and we are expecting the party to be organised without any glaring issue from your end. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Mohammed Abu

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire about your exclusive seminar hall that we are planning to reserve for an official This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionhappening
event
. We are expecting a few additional amenities in order to accommodate the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionhappening
event
 without any intervention and to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 it a success.

We will Possible spelling mistake. 'organise' is British English.organize
organise
 the annual This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
-together party and I would like to know the availability of your seminar hall during the second week of next
 March. Our agenda will be staff This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
-up followed by an hour-long presentation and it would conclude with a grand dinner party. We would require a high-resolution LCD projector and the Wi-Fi connection facility for Laptops. The seating arrangement is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :anticipated
expected
 to be for almost 100 This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
. We also
 require facilities for welcome drinks for guests and dinner for all of them.

I am curious to know about the rates to hire the hall for 6 hours, from 4: 00 pm to 10: 00 pm, with the list of facilities it offers. Additionally
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 me the menu for dinner including drinks. Also
, mention the best possible concession you can offer and break down the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :anticipated
expected
 expenses. We will not compromise the hygienic and food Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).quality, and
quality and
 we are expecting the party to be Possible spelling mistake. 'organised' is British English.organized
organised
 without any glaring issue from your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
.

I look forward to hearing from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Yours faithfully
,

Mohammed Abu

4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You are organising an executive event for the company you work for. Write a letter to the person in charge of a venue that you are considering for the event and ask for detailed information regarding dates, services and costs. v. 2

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

223 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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