Dear Sir,
With all due respect, I would like to inform you about the current condition of the different equipment in our manufacturing plant of our company, Honda Limited. The situation is quite dreadful and the efficiency of the equipment is well below expected. Furthermore, the current staff are not trained to handle the materials and facilities. As a result, the maintenance cost if adversely affecting our profits.
I have a few recommendations to make and I hope you will take this into consideration within the next few months. First of all, most of our mechanics and electricians need to be trained to use the latest equipment. Furthermore, some of the old equipment is consuming too much energy and releasing excessive amounts of pollutants. Hence, they should be replaced immediately. Last but not least, the logistics and supply of different materials is not well managed. If an experienced personnel is put in charge, then we can cut down costs and increase profits.
I think that the suggested areas are good improvements and the return on investment will be high since it is likely that these will result in increased concentration of the staff due to more utilization of the resources as well as optimization of the production process. Please let me know if you need detailed outline of the different upgrades. I am happy to assist you in any matter regarding this.
Sincerely Yours.
Dear Sir,
With all due respect, I would like to inform you about the
current
condition of the
different
equipment
in our manufacturing plant of our
company
, Honda Limited. The situation is quite dreadful and the efficiency of the
equipment
is well below
expected
.
Furthermore
, the
current
staff are not trained to handle the materials and facilities.
As a result
, the maintenance cost if
adversely
affecting our profits.
I have a few recommendations to
make
and I hope you will take this into consideration within the
next
few months.
First of all
, most of our mechanics and electricians need to
be trained
to
use
the latest
equipment
.
Furthermore
,
some of the
old
equipment
is consuming too much energy and releasing excessive amounts of pollutants.
Hence
, they should
be replaced
immediately. Last
but
not least, the logistics and supply of
different
materials is not well managed. If an experienced personnel
is put
in charge, then we can
cut
down costs and increase profits.
I
think
that the suggested areas are
good
improvements and the return on investment will be high since it is likely that these will result in increased concentration of the staff due to more utilization of the resources
as well
as optimization of the production process.
Please
let
me know if you need detailed outline of the
different
upgrades. I am happy to assist you in any matter regarding this.
Sincerely
Yours.
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