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You are organising a local committee meeting. You would like a local MP to attend the meeting to contribute to a discussion about green areas in the community. Write a letter of invitation to the MP's secretary, Mrs Shelton. In your letterintroduc v.6

You are organising a local committee meeting. You would like a local MP to attend the meeting to contribute to a discussion about green areas in the community. Write a letter of invitation to the MP's secretary, Mrs Shelton. In your letterintroduc v. 6
Dear Mrs Shelton, I am an organising member of the non-profit organisation ' Our Green Planet' , writing on behalf of our foundation and community members to invite the honourable MP, Mr Alex Cooper, to attend a conference about green areas on 21st December 2018 at Grand Hall. I am hoping that you would inform the honourable MP regarding the meeting and schedule his time for the same. We are proud to have a delegate who represents us in the parliament and an advocate of the green movement. As a founding member of the ' Our Green Planet' , I deem him the best person to have a discussion with the local citizens in this regards. ' Our Green Planet' has started its journey in 2001 and working to increase awareness about the green movement. Our organization has been highlighted in numerous national and international events and publications. 21st February 2018 is our 8th anniversary of this wonderful journey and we would like to make it special by focusing our goal, spreading awareness among people how individual steps can make our planet a better place to live in. We would be highly motivated if the honourable MP can spare some of his precious time and attend the meeting to discuss his views on that. We are expecting him to stay for an hour. It would be so kind of you if you could inform our respected MP about the invitation and explain to him how important it is for us to have him. Thanks in advance. Yours faithfully, Laura Matthew
Dear Mrs Shelton,

I am an
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organising
member of the non-profit
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organisation
' Our
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Green
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,
writing on behalf of our foundation and community members to invite the
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honourable
MP, Mr Alex Cooper, to attend a conference about
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green
areas on 21st December 2018 at Grand Hall. I am hoping that you would inform the
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honourable
MP regarding the meeting and schedule his time for the same.

We are proud to have a delegate who represents us in the parliament and an advocate of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
green
movement. As a founding member of the ' Our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Green
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Planet&
#039;
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,
I deem him the best person to have a discussion with the local citizens in
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this
regards. ' Our
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Green
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Planet&
#039; has
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started
its journey in 2001 and working to increase awareness about the
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green
movement. Our
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organization
has
been highlighted
in numerous national and international
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events
and publications.

21st February 2018 is our 8th anniversary of this wonderful
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journey and
we would like to
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make
it special by focusing our goal, spreading awareness among
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people
how individual steps can
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make
our
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planet
a better place to
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live
in. We would be
highly
motivated if the
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honourable
MP can spare
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some
of his precious time and attend the meeting to discuss his views on that. We are expecting him to stay for an hour.

It would be
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so
kind of you if you could inform our respected MP about the invitation and
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explain
to him how
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important
it is for us to have him.

Thanks in advance.

Yours
faithfully
,

Laura Matthew
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS letter You are organising a local committee meeting. You would like a local MP to attend the meeting to contribute to a discussion about green areas in the community. Write a letter of invitation to the MP's secretary, Mrs Shelton. In your letterintroduc v. 6

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
259 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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