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You are currently renting an apartment with your family. However, you have been relocated to another city for work. Your rental contracts does not end for another five months which means you need to break the contract early. Write a letter to the landlord v.2

You are currently renting an apartment with your family. However, you have been relocated to another city for work. Your rental contracts does not end for another five months which means you need to break the contract early. Write a letter to the landlord v. 2
Dear Mr. White, I am tenant of your flat 403 Rose Villa apartment and have been renting for last seven months. I am writing this letter to inform you that I will break the contract before set expiry date. As you are aware that I work for multinational company having offices in different countries. Recently promotion was given to me and became senior manager India operation. As a result, I would be moving to India, probably New Delhi region. I am sorry to inform you at eleventh hour but promotion news was told to me yesterday and it was complete surprise for me and family as well. I understand the obligation of breaking the contract early so I will start looking the suitable tenant for your property from tomorrow, if you allow. In case we do not find the suitable tenant, I will continue to pay the rent until tenant is found. I have contacted to advertising agency and they are ready to advertise in all leading newspaper. I will bear the expense of advertise the apartment. I hope you would understand my situation and I thank you in advance for comprehension. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely XXX
Dear Mr. White,

I am
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tenant
of your flat 403 Rose Villa apartment and have been renting for last seven months. I am writing this letter to inform you that I will break the contract
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
set expiry date.

As you are aware that I work for multinational
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
having offices in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
countries. Recently promotion was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to me and became senior manager India operation.
As a result
, I would be moving to India,
probably
New Delhi region. I am sorry to inform you at eleventh hour
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
promotion news was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
The verb 'to tell someone' does not require a preposition.
to me
yesterday and it was complete surprise for me and family
as well
.

I understand the obligation of breaking the contract early
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so
I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
looking the suitable
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tenant
for your property from tomorrow, if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
. In case we do not find the suitable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tenant
, I will continue to pay the rent until
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tenant
is found
. I have contacted to advertising
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
agency and
they are ready to advertise in all leading newspaper. I will bear the expense of advertise the apartment.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope you would understand my situation and I thank you in advance for comprehension.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely


XXX
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You are currently renting an apartment with your family. However, you have been relocated to another city for work. Your rental contracts does not end for another five months which means you need to break the contract early. Write a letter to the landlord v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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