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Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.10

Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. v. 10
People have different views on how medical research should be conducted and tested. Although many people support the use of animal experimentations for developing medicines, I personally believe that animal testing is morally wrong. The main reason why some people value animal experimentations to conduct medical research is because animal testing has contributed to many life-saving cures and treatments. It is true that nearly every medical breakthrough in the last 100 years has resulted directly from research using animals. For example, experiments in which dogs had their pancreases removed led directly to the discovery of insulin, critical to saving the lives of diabetics. Furthermore, it is impossible to release new drugs to the market before proving it has no harm to humans and laboratory mice are appropriate research subjects because they are similar to human beings in many ways. However, I support with people who consider medical development that involved the use of animals is cruel and unacceptable. I believe that the lives of all creatures should be respected and we, humans, have no right to suffer animals for our own benefits. Governments should invest in developing alternative methods that can replace using animal experimentations when doing medical research. For example, a software program can be developed to model a human immune system and new drugs can be tested on the software rather than animals. In this way, no animals will suffer from the medical tests and the society can still benefit from medical development. In conclusion, although it is undoubtedly true that animal testing has helped scientists in drug developments and medical discoveries, I believe that the benefits to humans do not justify the suffering caused to animals and we should use alternative methods when doing medical research that do not involve animals suffering.
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experimentations
for developing medicines, I
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believe that
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animal
testing is
morally
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wrong
.

The main reason why
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some
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people
value
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animal
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experimentations
to conduct
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medical
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research
is
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because
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animal
testing has contributed to
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many
life-saving cures and treatments. It is true that
nearly
every
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medical
breakthrough in the last 100 years has resulted
directly
from
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research
using
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animals
.
For example
, experiments in which dogs had their pancreases removed led
directly
to the discovery of insulin, critical to saving the
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lives
of diabetics.
Furthermore
, it is impossible to release new drugs to the market
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before
proving it has no harm to
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humans
and laboratory mice are appropriate
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research
subjects
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they are similar to
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human
beings in
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ways.

However
, I support with
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people
who consider
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medical
development that involved the
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use
of
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animals
is cruel and unacceptable. I believe that the
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lives
of all creatures should be
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respected and
we,
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humans
, have no right to suffer
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animals
for our
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own
benefits.
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Governments
should invest in developing alternative methods that can replace using
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animal
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experimentations
when doing
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medical
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research
.
For example
, a software program can
be developed
to model a
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human
immune system and new drugs can be
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tested
on the software
rather
than
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animals
. In this way, no
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animals
will suffer from the
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medical
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tests
and the society can
still
benefit from
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medical
development.

In conclusion
, although it is
undoubtedly
true that
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animal
testing has
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helped
scientists in drug developments and
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medical
discoveries, I believe that the benefits to
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humans
do not justify the suffering caused to
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animals and
we should
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use
alternative methods when doing
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medical
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research
that do not involve
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animals
suffering.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. v. 10

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295 words
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