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Write a letter to your company’s director recommending a group in your local community that deserve help. why do you suggest that group? How can your company help that group? How that can benefit your company in return? v.1

Write a letter to your company’s director recommending a group in your local community that deserve help. why do you suggest that group? How can your company help that group? How that can benefit your company in return? v. 1
Dear Mr. Adam, I am writing to recommend a local group for a donation. This will help our local community as a whole in addition to our colleagues with low pay scales. The Children Welfare group is local non-profit organization run by a couple of friends. Their goal is to eradicate illiteracy and install practical talent in the poor children of our community. They have recently run out of funds to run their latest project to construct a school for the poor children. In this respect, our company can provide them with books, sports equipment, contribute to the teacher’s salaries or furniture like chairs and tables, which can help to smooth running this great cause. On the other hand, our company will be tremendously benefited by such contribution. As it will increase our reputation, which will in turn increase our sales. Additionally, they have promised to provide free education to the children of our lower management staff. Which will increase their morale and motivation level. I hope to hear from you, in case you need any further information about the organization, feel free to contact me on my mobile number. Yours sincerely, SAIRA
Dear Mr. Adam,

I am writing to recommend a local group for a donation. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
our local community as a whole
in addition
to our colleagues with low pay scales.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Children
Welfare group is local non-profit organization run by a couple of friends. Their goal is to eradicate illiteracy and install practical talent in the poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
of our community. They have recently run out of funds to run their latest project to construct a school for the poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. In this respect, our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
can provide them with books, sports equipment, contribute to the teacher’s salaries or furniture like chairs and tables, which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to smooth running this great cause.

On the other hand
, our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
will be
tremendously
benefited by such contribution. As it will increase our reputation, which will in turn increase our sales.
Additionally
, they have promised to provide free education to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
of our lower management staff. Which will increase their morale and motivation level.

I hope to hear from you, in case you need any
further
information about the organization, feel free to contact me on my mobile number.

Yours
sincerely
,

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SAIRA
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter Write a letter to your company’s director recommending a group in your local community that deserve help. why do you suggest that group? How can your company help that group? How that can benefit your company in return? v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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