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The line graph shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a 6-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparison where relevant. v.1

The line graph shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a 6-month period in 2011.
The presented line graph compares three means of information in terms of their reports received by the Tourist Information Office of a certain urban area from January to June in 2011. Overall, telephone was the least popular tool for enquiry among three surveyed counterparts, reflected by its lowest figure throughout the period. In addition, while it was also the only section expressing a general decrease, opposite trends were witnessed in remaining categories. Turning into detail, in the first quarter, starting at approximately 300, enquiries sent by telephone expanded gradually to reach the peak of exactly 400, which subsequently fell to below 300 queries in March. Meanwhile, similar levels of fluctuation were displayed in other groups. However, while face-to-face enquiries slightly went up, those of email remained unchanged at 400 at the end of this stage. Regarding to the next quarter, the figure for telephone questioning was kept stable by April, before declining steadily to above 200 questions in June. By contrast, in comparison queries sent by person, which grew considerably to over 800, the number for email significantly increased to about 1200 questions. Moreover, this remarkable gain made it surpass two remaining sectors to be the most prevalent mean of inquiring, according to data collected until June.
The presented line graph compares three means of information in terms of their reports received by the Tourist Information Office of a certain urban area from January to June in 2011.

Overall
, telephone was the least popular tool for
enquiry
among three surveyed counterparts, reflected by its lowest figure throughout the period.
In addition
, while it was
also
the
only
section expressing a general decrease, opposite trends
were witnessed
in remaining categories.

Turning into detail, in the
first
quarter, starting at approximately 300,
enquiries
sent
by telephone expanded
gradually
to reach the peak of exactly 400, which
subsequently
fell to below 300 queries in March. Meanwhile, similar levels of fluctuation
were displayed
in other groups.
However
, while face-to-face
enquiries
slightly
went up, those of email remained unchanged at 400 at the
end
of this stage.

Regarding to
the
next
quarter, the figure for telephone questioning was
kept
stable by April,
before
declining
steadily
to above 200 questions in June. By contrast,
in comparison
queries
sent
by person, which grew
considerably
to over 800, the number for email
significantly
increased to about 1200 questions.
Moreover
, this remarkable gain made it surpass two remaining sectors to be the most prevalent mean of inquiring, according to data collected until June.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter The line graph shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a 6-month period in 2011.

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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