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You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. v.3

You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that I was delivered an empty envelope which was supposed to carry my debit card issued by the Northshire branch of your City Bank. Since I have not received any card, I can not acknowledge its acquisition. I am hoping you would investigate how this happened and issue me a new card. Also, take measured to stop any misuse of the lost card. I have been maintaining a checking account with your Lordshire branch since 2017 and my account number is CKL-54785120145. Recently, I requested a new silver debit card and when I opened the envelope yesterday, I noticed that the card was missing! Now I am concerned about the whereabouts of the card. If it goes to the wrong hand, it might be misused. To stop such an incident, please stop the issued card as soon as possible. I would like you to investigate the reason for such an unexpected incident. Also, issue me a similar new card and this time allow me to fetch it from my branch instead of sending it via a courier. Thank you in advance and I would like to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Alex Ryan
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you that I
was delivered
an empty envelope which
was supposed
to carry my debit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
issued by the
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Northshire
branch of your City Bank. Since I have not received any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
, I can not acknowledge its acquisition. I am hoping you would investigate how this happened and issue me a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
.
Also
, take measured to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
any misuse of the lost card.

I have been maintaining a checking account with your
Possible spelling mistake found.
Lordshire
branch since 2017 and my account number is CKL-54785120145. Recently, I requested a new silver debit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
and when I opened the envelope yesterday, I noticed that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
was missing!
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
I
am concerned
about the whereabouts of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
. If it goes to the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
hand, it might
be misused
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
such an incident,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
the issued
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

I would like you to investigate the reason for such an unexpected incident.
Also
, issue me a similar new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
and this time
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to fetch it from my branch
instead
of sending it via a courier.

Thank you in advance and I would like to hear from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Alex Ryan
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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