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Write a letter to government about lack of sport facilities in your hometown for people on your age In your letter you should tell what facilities you want why you want them what suggestions you can give v.2

Write a letter to government about lack of sport facilities in your hometown for people on your age In your letter you should tell what facilities you want why you want them what suggestions you can give v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to draw your attention on the sport facilities which is lacking in our city. Recently I have shifted to this wonderful city with my family, but to surprise I came to know that there is not big stadium available in the city, which provide the variety of sporting facilities under single roof. I think development of stadium is vital for the proper development of the people living here. I am national level hockey player and working in public sector under sports quota and most of the time I keeps on travelling. But when I will be at home it will be difficult for me to practice. So if a stadium is opened, me along with other youngsters can ripe the benefit and may make the country pride at international level. There is a lot of vacant space available in the outskirt of the city which can be utilized for the construction of stadium can I am sure it will change the life of many people and they gain the name at national and international live and make the city famous. Apart from this, because of these people can also stay fit and healthy. Hope you will consider my request. Yours faithfully, Maninder Vadhrah
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to draw your attention on the sport facilities which is lacking in our city.

Recently I have shifted to this wonderful city with my family,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
to surprise I came to know that there is not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stadium
available in the city, which provide the variety of sporting facilities under single roof. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stadium
is vital for the proper development of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
living here.

I am national level hockey player and working in public sector under sports quota and most of the time I
The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "keep"
keeps
on travelling.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
when I will be at home it will be difficult for me to practice.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
if a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stadium
is opened
, me along with other youngsters can ripe the benefit and may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the country pride at international level.

There is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
vacant space available in the outskirt of the city which can
be utilized
for the construction of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stadium
can I am sure it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the life of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
people and
they gain the name at national and international
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the city
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
. Apart from this,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can
also
stay fit and healthy.

Hope you will consider my request.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Maninder
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Vadhrah
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IELTS letter Write a letter to government about lack of sport facilities in your hometown for people on your age In your letter you should tell what facilities you want why you want them what suggestions you can give v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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