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Essay topics: You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter1) Explain your situation2) Say why you feel unsure about v.2

Essay topics: You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter1) Explain your situation2) Say why you feel unsure about v. 2
Dear John, I am writing to ask you about a favor. As you know I have been dreaming about living in a big megalopolis since I was a teenager and now it seems that the dream came true – I have been hired by a computer company whose office is located in Los Angeles. So, I am going to move to LA in the next month. I will need your help with search of a proper flat because, frankly, my budget is tight and I wanna find cheap apartments near my new workplace. I know that you have a lot of friends in the city and maybe someone may rent me a flat for a reasonable price. Additionally, I hope that you will show me around, you are my only friend in the city and with your help I will quickly adapt to the new environment. Finally, I have a couple of questions. Firstly, how much money should I have at the beginning? I assume that living in such an enormous city as Los Angeles should be expensive. Secondly, what clothes should I take with me? I will arrive in December, should I have any warm clothes? My mother is going to give me a knitted sweater and a hat but I think that I needn’t have any of those things. Sincerely yours, Eugene.
Dear John,

I am writing to ask you about a favor.

As you know I have been dreaming about living in a
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big
megalopolis since I was a
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teenager
and
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now
it seems that the dream came true
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–
I have
been hired
by a computer
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company
whose office
is located
in Los Angeles.
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So
, I am going to
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move
to LA in the
next
month.

I will need your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with search of a proper flat
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because
,
frankly
, my budget is tight and I
The word 'wanna' is informal. Consider an alternative.
wanna
find
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
apartments near my new workplace. I know that you have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
friends in the city and maybe someone may rent me a flat for a reasonable price.
Additionally
, I hope that you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
me around, you are my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
friend in the city and with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
I will
quickly
adapt to the new environment.

Finally
, I have a couple of questions.
Firstly
, how much money should I have at the beginning? I assume that living in such an enormous city as Los Angeles should be expensive.
Secondly
, what clothes should I take with me? I will arrive in December, should I have any warm clothes? My mother is going to give me a knitted sweater and a hat
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I
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think
that I needn’t have any of those things.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Essay topics: You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter1) Explain your situation2) Say why you feel unsure about v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
224 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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