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You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. v.2

You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. v. 2
Dear Mr Reeve, Hope you are well. I am writing this letter to inform you that sadly, I won’t be able to continue my voluntary work for your organisation as I will move to another city at the beginning of September. Just so you know, I have been involved with your organisation for almost 2 years, and I must say that I have enjoyed it so much. Helping homeless people, collecting non-perishable food items from people in order to donate to your food bank, and cleaning our neighbourhood from time to time were some excellent work that I did. Besides, I have also learned about how to build a team and motivate its members in a common good humanitarian cause as well as coordinating their activities. In fact, after working here for almost 2 years, I started to consider each and every staff of this organisation as my family. But, as much as I would like to continue, the truth is I won’t be able to do so because I will have to move to another city with my family for professional reason. However, before I leave, I would like to recommend Mr Marcus, one of my colleagues at my current office, who has expressed his interest to carry on with the task what I was doing. I hope you can meet him next Friday to talk to him in details. Thank you once again and I will miss you all. Yours sincerely, John Trent
Dear Mr Reeve,

Hope you are well. I am writing this letter to inform you that
sadly
, I won’t be able to continue my voluntary work for your
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organisation
as I will
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move
to another city at the beginning of September.

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Just
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
you know, I have
been involved
with your
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
for almost 2 years, and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
say that I have enjoyed it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much. Helping homeless
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, collecting non-perishable food items from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in order to donate to your food bank, and cleaning our
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neighbourhood
from time to time were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
excellent work that I did.
Besides
, I have
also
learned about how to build a team and motivate its members in a common
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
humanitarian cause
as well
as coordinating their activities.

In fact, after working here for almost 2 years, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to consider each and every staff of this
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
as my family.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
, as much as I would like to continue, the truth is I won’t be able to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to another city with my family for professional reason.

However
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
, I would like to recommend Mr Marcus, one of my colleagues at my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
office, who has expressed his interest to carry on with the task what I was doing. I hope you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
him
next
Friday to talk to him in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
.

Thank you once again and I will miss you all.

Yours
sincerely
,

John Trent
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
244 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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