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You have been working in a company for many years and have noticed that new employees often leave your company. Now write a letter to your higher authority and suggest the possible reasons for that and ways to retain them. v.1

You have been working in a company for many years and have noticed that new employees often leave your company. Now write a letter to your higher authority and suggest the possible reasons for that and ways to retain them. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is John Desuja and I am working for this company for approximately 2 decades. I am writing to express my concerns in relation to the current scenario of low staff retention in our company, especially with regard to younger and relatively new recruits. I would like to share my ideas to improve the retention rate. One of the main reason behind this high attrition rate is the lack of opportunities in terms of professional advancement, according to those who left our company during the last two years, which I think should be well taken care of. A team of experts may think of different strategies towards this, which should bring out programs to enhance skills, providing different job titles and look into the promotional aspects for young employees. Another important reason, which one of our employees shared with me at an exit interview, is the dearth of open communication between the management and the workforce, which needs to be improved by providing them with a platform to air their concerns and suggestions, and ensuring that these are well-acted upon. Furthermore, the work-life balance of the employees may be observed closely for betterment. Finally, I would like to suggest that appreciation of work on a regular basis can also work magic. I look forward to a positive step in this direction to improve employee retention in our company. Yours faithfully, John Desuja
Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is John
Desuja and
I am working for this
company
for approximately 2 decades. I am writing to express my concerns in relation to the
current
scenario of low staff retention in our
company
,
especially
with regard to younger and
relatively
new recruits. I would like to share my
ideas
to
improve
the retention rate.

One of the main reason behind this high attrition rate is the lack of opportunities in terms of professional advancement, according to those who
left
our
company
during the last two years, which I
think
should be well taken care of. A team of experts may
think
of
different
strategies towards this, which should bring out programs to enhance
skills
, providing
different
job titles and look into the promotional aspects for young employees.

Another
important
reason, which one of our employees shared with me at an exit interview, is the dearth of open communication between the management and the workforce, which needs to be
improved
by providing them with a platform to air their concerns and suggestions, and ensuring that these are well-acted upon.
Furthermore
, the work-life balance of the employees may
be observed
closely
for betterment.

Finally
, I would like to suggest that appreciation of work on a regular basis can
also
work magic.

I look forward to a
positive
step in this direction to
improve
employee retention in our
company
.

Yours
faithfully
,

John
Desuja
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You have been working in a company for many years and have noticed that new employees often leave your company. Now write a letter to your higher authority and suggest the possible reasons for that and ways to retain them. v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
236 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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