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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge a v.14

Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. with this statement? 14
With the flourishing development of life, opinion has divided on whether or not scientific study would be implemented and managed via the governments or individual associations. Notwithstanding, the idea that banning the latter in this field is entirely against my belief. Scientific experiments likely require an enormous amount of money, which would accounted for billions, should be under control of private companies by two main reasons. Firstly and possible reason is that they have enough money to defray expensive expenditure of studies because of their lucrative projects. A association would have several projects to prove great boons to their company and considered as back-up plans for the main strategy. Secondly and, their progress would be in process with high pace prior to omitting many administrative procedures. For example, if a team has ambition to study about new remedy for cancer, they must have the permission, which mainly prolong the time of research, from the laboratory management to the secretary of ministry of health. Regardless of the benefits, there are bound to be those who doubt this proposal. Advocates of the former may think that there may be concerns about the quality of products produced by companies. In addition, they also support the idea that government could do researches with the observation of many experts, who follow to the manifold rules enacted by the ministry. However, the rules of ministry could circumscribe particular leaps of discoveries owing to the fact that there will comes to ideologies if there is no restriction. Moreover, individual companies possibly have several good financial packages to attract more experts to warrant the quality of their products, which also determine their success. In conclusion, it is necessary to emphasize that the importance of individual associations is undeniable so the governments should not interfere in their business or even ban them of the field of science.
With the flourishing development of life, opinion has divided on
Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether". It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
whether or not
scientific study would
be implemented
and managed via the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
or individual associations. Notwithstanding, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that banning the latter in this field is
entirely
against my belief.

Scientific experiments likely require an enormous amount of money, which would accounted for billions, should be under control of private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
by two main reasons.
Firstly
and possible reason is that they have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
money to defray expensive expenditure of studies
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their lucrative projects.
Use "An" instead of 'A' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
A
association would have several projects to prove great boons to their
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company
and considered as back-up plans for the main strategy.
Secondly
and, their progress would be in process with high pace prior to omitting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
administrative procedures.
For example
, if a team has ambition to study about new remedy for cancer, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
have the permission, which
mainly
prolong the time of research, from the laboratory management to the secretary of ministry of health.

Regardless of the benefits, there
are bound
to be those who doubt this proposal. Advocates of the former may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that there may be concerns about the quality of products produced by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
.
In addition
, they
also
support the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
could do researches with the observation of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
experts, who follow to the manifold
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
enacted by the ministry.
However
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
of ministry could circumscribe particular leaps of discoveries owing to the fact that there will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "come"
comes
to ideologies if there is no restriction.
Moreover
, individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
possibly
have several
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
financial packages to attract more experts to warrant the quality of their products, which
also
determine their success.

In conclusion
, it is necessary to emphasize that the importance of individual associations is undeniable
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should not interfere in their business or even ban them of the field of science.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
Roger Ascham

IELTS letter Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. with this statement? 14

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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